If I call you beautiful

If I call you beautiful…

 

do flowers bloom within your worried eyes

surrounding you with color, with thoughts

Looking past the mirror to that place you have been,

that you long to be again

 

Do you bite your lip,

looking within, seeking past the darkness,

subconsciously smoothing the ruffles of your dress,

shuffling your feet a bit

 

Do memories flood your mind

of days before lipstick and eye shadow,

when cute was as common as wrinkled nose smiles,

playing inside or out were your choices

 

Do you roll your eyes and sigh,

describing a portrait that only you can see,

a mirage of impressions you have collected,

stored away in that file you reach for regularly

 

Do you brand me blind or crazy at least,

point to that one tiny blemish you know of,

turn and walk away kicking dust as you go,

shutting the door in disbelief

 

Or do you see your reflection in my eyes,

the woman that you are to me,

hear the affection in my voice, the truth

and wrinkle your nose once more and say, “I love you”

 

~

Reviews

[lightsong]

I did read this few days ago, I am not sure why I didn't leave my review... maybe I was taken by your breathtaking last verse that I forgot.

How You built it, verse after another... expressing with commitment and confident that "forever love" You've spoken about, because what I see behind the lines, a love that goes ages ago and still alive till this day. oh well, do I have to tell You how deep and strong that last verse touches the Women's hearts?

[willweb]

Thank you so very much my friend. This one is special to me and I am thrilled you enjoyed it.

[lightsong]

You are welcome my friend, did You post the sequel ?

[willweb]

No, I haven't done so yet. Soon maybe. : )

[lightsong]

Ok :> I am here not traveling anywhere lol

[BelowAverage]

Others better placed than me to do so have already commented on this. I just want to add I really enjoyed the poem and I found it quite moving. In particular "Or do you see your reflection in my eyes, the woman that you are to me," is beautiful. I have read the poem many times in the past few days and those lines get me everytime.

[willweb]

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a nice comment for me. I appreciate your visit.

[light and ashes]

This is so sweet..........

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend.

[River]

This is such a lovely piece; but then again, all of your pieces have been. I've spent some time reading them and they're all blooming with expression and specific moods. I adore being able to feel the warmth/cold of a poem and your pieces convey that effectively. Well done!

[willweb]

Thank you so much River. Your comment humbles me. I do hope when I write that others will feel what I am feeling but often you never know, so I thank you for this great review.

[River]

You're very welcome. We can only hope that our readers feel the emotions we're trying to express, so it's truly stellar when a poet is able to make that possible. Thank you for the captivating poems.

[Joanne Hanscome]

This actually brought tears to my eyes. It really touched my heart. I think you need to publish a book for you have so many wonderful pieces of work. And I would buy a copy. Let me know if you publish.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Joanna, what a nice thing to say. I appreciate your kindness and I am happy you liked this one.

[Seriana]

Awwee, I love this. It reflects your title of "Beautiful" perfectly. The 3rd stanza was especially nice. Bringing back thoughts of innocent days when none of the rest were worries. It's hard to get past the "should-bes" as a woman some days. I can feel her hesitation in the wrinkling of the nose. "I Love You" is the perfect respond and ending. I really enjoyed this piece!

[willweb]

Thank you Seriana for your beautiful comments on my poem. I am excited you enjoyed this one. Thank you again for taking the time to read and comment

[JENNY]

Making one realise what she belongs to and what she like is the strongest power t your words hold in this wonderful poetry of yours. I loved your poem in my virtue that one can be you yourself.Just stand in front mirror and ask yourself If I call you beautiful…and rest is the honesty you show to yourself

[willweb]

beauty is not only in the eyes of the beholder but it should also be in ourselves. I know we think we could look better or thinner or have better hair or whatever but, the person you are is beautiful and others see that as well. Thank you Jenny. I am happy you liked this.

[JENNY]

Your most welcome

[Lilly]

I grew up being very harsh and critical of myself, and with self-image issues etc... on a bad day now, my partner knows I would be thinking as you have described in the 4th and 5th verses. But I'm working on having the feeling of the last verse be my default. It gets easier with age too I think.
Lovely poem.

[willweb]

I believe everyone is beautiful in one way or another but the beauty that someone who loves you sees...is the only thing that matters. Don't be so rough on yourself, I am sure you are very beautiful.

[Dan in TSC]

Youth verses age... surface verses depth...relationship verses partnership...This poem threw so many memories up in my mind, both of my wife and my daughters and allowed me to relive so much. A truly wonderful piece that tells a clearly personal story, but lets the reader feel it is their own personal story as well. Thank you.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Dan. I am thrilled you could relate to this and appreciate your kindness.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

This is so beautifully expressed! It could be for either a partner or a daughter. It flows with ease and love , both teasing and admirable. Makes me wonder what mine would see in me. I find a great deal of warmth in your writing! Glad Ive stepped back in to read more!

[willweb]

I am glad to and am happy to have met you and found your poetry. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one. I am sure yours would find the beauty they have always seen.