It's All Over

True mixture of old and present life. (Didn't even realize it till my hubby ??'d it.)

It's All Over

I'm done, I'm through

I'm sick and tired of

hurting from you

 

You did me wrong,

not just once but twice

You had no respect only lies

 

We had it all

We had the world in

the palms of our hands

We even wore matching

wedding bands

 

It's over now

It's dead and gone

It's to bad

It's so damn sad

It's over yet I'm so very glad

 

When you get this note,

I'll be long gone

When you realize what you've done,

When you figure out you were the one

don't bother to call cause like I said

I'll be long gone

 

cuz

 

It's All Over

 

7/14/08  Windy

 

 

Author's Note

Note: this poem was kind of strange for me as it was a mixture of bad past and good present! It ended up working out somehow but I have no idea how! LOL

Reviews

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I like it! for a poem expressing a womans firm determination of moving on after a relationship that went south, it caught the feeling really well!

I suspect this to be very relatable by many a girl. As many of men have gotten the case of the stupids and messed it all up.

This was very well writen and flowed nicely through the mind.

Great Write Windy!
Ashley

[Donna DeLong Matthews a..]

Now talk about strong emotion this is not just strong but powerful, but it takes powerful
to take the control of ones life back. This was an excellent display of raw emotion
Enjoyed the read and Im glad it worked out in the end.
Hugs
D

[westerfanaddict]

I love it. It speaks, holds great emotion, all I was cringing on was the punc. and spelling lol
Good job! Oh and thank you for the request. -Clara

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow such strong emotions but that's what happens when someone finally pushes you to far... I loved the strong independence that spills from this write. Wonderful job.

[Jordan]

I can sense the great emotion that you have instilled into this work of poetry, and I think you did a very great job on this! It was a wonderful write, and I enjoyed reading this work!

I suppose that this could relate to a great amount of people, mainly females, of course. Guys can be quite stupid about these types of things, I concede. I, personally, haven't really gotten into anything such as this, but I can just picture what has happened with you in your past.

This piece had a wonderful flow to it. Things went in order very well, and I don't see many flaws in this writing. I actually pictures this piece to be a part of a song, since that was how it played through in my mind, though that could be just my opinion, of course. I actually found myself verbalizing the lyrics, albeit silently.

One last thing: Though most writings usually have punctuation, it is more accommodating with writings in stories. It is nice to have it in some poetry, it isn't always required, so keep that in mind.

All in all, I believe this was a wonderful peace, and I encourage you to keep writing(Funny, since I'm younger than you and all...oh well.) I look forward to reading more of your works!

[Blue Sky]

You did an outstanding job!
The expressions to the thud of a relationship
time to move on, the flow and rhyme was spectacular!
and with that, knowing you'll 'be long gone'
movin on, well done, written this wonderfully
Thank you for sharing this!

[Reuel]

It's very sad, and filled with emotion. I sense the hurt. I like the rhyme scheme

[Nancy]

Hi Windy,

Thanks for your kind review. This poem would bake an excellent song lyric. In fact as I was reading my mind was working out music. Thank you for sharing this beautiful and vulerable bit of yourself with us.

[darkgurl]

I can feel the heartbreak and emotion in this, I can really relate to it. Expressed so well.

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Wow! A lot of thought and emotion put into this piece. Can really relate, my friend. The pain and the heartache that you convey is deeply felt and extremely well written.

Keep writing, sweetheart!

hugs,

Sharla