TONIGHT

Missing my better half!

 

 

 

TONIGHT

 

 

Tonight as I lay here in our bed

trying to no avail to go to sleep

all I can think about is you're not

here with me

 

 

No matter how hard I try

I can't find a spot on this bed

where I can be comfortable without

your shoulder under my head

 

 

The pillows all seem so flat

the sheet won't stay in place

the blanket is so tangled up

I have no place to lay

 

 

The dog keeps barking at nothing

I think she is just annoyed

cause you weren't here to feed

her tonight right at 5:30

 

 

I didn't used to get so scared being

on my own, but times have changed

and so have I cuz I really need to feel

your arms holding me right now

 

 

You have no idea just how very much you're

missed, when you aren't here with us

we tend to just sit and count the day's

and nights till we're together again

 

 

One...

 

 

 

Windy 7/14/08

Author's Note

This is really for my husband, so he knows how much he is missed! Comments are welome and appreciated.

Reviews

[These Haunted Hallways]

Yea, this was perfection. Flawless, and witty. I, too, get extremely lonely. I dont have anyone to call my own, yet alone i dont have a job yet, which makes it even worse, bleh. But, in the end, i guess we find someone sooner or later, and they have the power to love, and cheer us up. And may your beau be with you guys soon :) Great poem!

B.A.

[Barbara Walker]

Again, you write in no enigmatic way, with hidden meanings and far reaching metaphors for me to try to figure out! I love that about your writing. I did find myself wanting to put some rhymes in here. You may not want to change a thing, so just humor me!LOL. But, first, in the first stanza, I stumbled over the second line. Maybe a little smoother, would be,"trying to sleep, but to no avail"? In the third stanza, I wanted to do away with the last line and use, "I feel like a basketcase."
The fourth stanza:
The dog is so very mad,
cause you weren't here to feed her tonight,
she keeps on barking and barking,
cause she doesn't think that's right.

Okay, I'm done now. I think I just wrote an entirely different poem!
kindest regards,
Barbara

[angelinmypocket]

Ohmygosh Windy...I hope you don't have to count very far. In reality, this situation is saturated with lonliness. It's universal...like a very important part of your life is missing...because he's not there. There's nothing colder than that warm spot in your bed where he was before. A wonderful write on loneliness.

[Helena]

Another beautiful write for "Keeping the Dream Alive" contest. Thank you for sharing and putting into words
so eloquently your feelings of "loneliness" once again.

PS. Hope he comes home soon....

~ Helena ~

[T]

Doesn't everything just feel so unnatural when our love one is away? You've penned your emotions to perfection and captured how it feels when you miss someone. I'm all over my bed too. lol Beautiful poem, darlin' ... hugs

[Pointblank]

Lovely. An emptyness sometimes hard to explain. The dog felt his absence also....and the twisting in the night all so true. Hits home. Good write.

[Mr. Lopez]

It's funny how much we get used to having our better half there all the time. And when they'er gone, the hole in our hearts that leaves us feeling , well....just uneasy. Can't eat, can't sleep. Not everyone feels this way but your poem tells me that you do. Very lovely write.

Mr.Lopez

[closed account]

yes this is a sad one, hopefully you will see him soon. being apart from the one you love is one of the hardest things to get through.

[Nassira]

You have written a very sweet and emotional poem here .... I enjoyed reading it and I am sure that your husband will enjoy reading it too! Thank you for sharing Windy :)

Salam to you and your family.

[emz]

I know the feeling... my partner works away from home and i miss him so much... this is such a personal, emotional write... might show it to my bloke!!! hehe


xxxx

[Emily Rose]

Awwww, once again, this is really adorable and your emotions come across so well. There's a great sweetness in your poetry that's hard to recreate. My only constructive comment is that in the second to last stanza, second line you say "I thinks she..." and I think you mean "think." :-) Good job!