Uneducated Fantasy

One of the ill effects of cruelty is that it makes the bystanders cruel

Bells ring violently in the air

Punches burning the bodies that care

School walls bleeding out words of pain

Fear flows rapidly thorough your veins

 

Teachers watch, as the students turn grey

Innocent hearts screaming for a way

Lockers glaring with rage

While identities are trapped in a cage

 

Black tears cutting down the cheek

Doors closing for the freak

Scars of bullying never hide

It jumps off the skin; committing suicide

Author's Note

I hope this is decent.. :S

Reviews

[torments_scribe]

Oh, I HATE bullying. And it happens to both of my older girls. I've had to contact counselors and principals. And they're not freakish or anything, kids just seem to have gotten overly mean these days. It's horrible!!

The poem was really meaningful, and if you couldn't tell, I identified with it right away :) It is frustrating that even when there's supposedly zero tolerance policies other students, and sometime even teachers just look away because they can't be bothered. And it saddens me even more that those who are doing the bullying and having their "fun" don't realize how much damage they're really doing. Great write!!

[LeaflessTree]

I love it! You have such an amazing rhyming flow! Unlike me D: But I love this!

[E.V. Black]

GothicPrincess, this is more than decent; it's excellent! Sadness and rage intermingle in a classic piece that reflects the sometimes injustice of human nature. And, reluctantly, the taking of a life to end pain. Pure genius!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Yes!!!!! Hearts are hardened as they turn away from all that they see afraid they will find themselves as the brunt of these games that people play. Sadly, this continues into adulthood. Penned well, GothicPrincess

[CharlesMonroe]

Wow, this is amazing :O it's so moving, an d touching, and the imagery is heartbreaking. You described it perfectlly. I love it (:

[Kenneth The Poet]

This hits close to home. Nice work.

[Dushyant Thadani]

This is completely dark... I love the way you've described a hellish school... Really sad, full of emotions, and very descriptive... Great job...

[Helpless]

its more than decent! you always have fantastic poetry! this is no exception!

[London]

wow..i loved this. 'scars of bullying never hide, it jumps off the skin committing suicide' so true. wonderful lines

[Sothe (White Princess)]

Wow...moving, touching, magnificent. I loved the way you described it....what is this based off of school? The way you describe it, it's like a living Hell, which I believe many can relate to. This is really touching though, and has a lot of emotion in it. Are all your descriptions quotes? Either way, it fits the poem nicely. Bravo, and Well Done.

[RedInk524]

A lot of pain stamped down with each letter. A true meaning too. Excellent.