I Wonder

To you
I wonder,
If you could see me, I would call you
I would call you to see if you would hear me
If you could hear me would you listen?
If you listened would you understand without judging me?
Judging me on who I am, what I do, and how I hear you
I hear you with fear inside me
Fear that if I listened I would fail to understand
I would not understand how you could hear, 

Hear, listen and understand without judging me
Still, my heart wonders, 

Wonders if you would forgive me
Forgive me because I love you
If only you could open your eyes and see me
I wonder
Love from me

Author's Note

This is the first ever poem I wrote. I always like to honour it by keeping it in my vault, kind of a door to the vault of the mysterious poems... ha-ha I say too much I know:)

Reviews

[Emberlorna]

For the first poem you ever wrote this is amazing :}

[Bluefire]

Very beautiful and mysterious, it gave me the feel of a ghost trying to get through to someone they loved, desperately seeking forgiveness. Well done, and amazing write! ^^

[Valentine]

For a first..not to bad but leaves a lot to question..I was so young when I started rhyming..I do not remember what I might have said..My mom and Grand mother were both published poets. Valentine

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Life is certainly full of what ifs and fears... I love the vulnerable aspect of the poem.

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

My pleasure

[Iddy]

This is very good for a first poem! :D~ I really like it. You have noticed you're good at writing poems, books, stories, and chapters, right? ^-^''...

[J. Write]

Thank you reading my work :)

[Iddy]

No problem at all! I always love to read great work. ^-^.

[Adam Clay]

Without considering that this is your first poem, it is of good quality. Some other time I might share the multiplicity of meaning I interpret from even a first reading. Poetry must have depth, as it seeks to tell much in only a few words. Most "poems" nowadays a randomly thrown words by bored individuals which has little or no depth and mystery. This piece, my friend, is poetry.

[J. Write]

Wow, Thank you for reading, and for your kind comments. I really appreciate your review. This is what makes me write more :)

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow for your first poem that is pretty amazing

[J. Write]

Thank you :)

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

i love this, that inner monolog that plays out when you first start a relationship!

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[Krista Weiss]

Wow!! really great poem!! I love it! :)

[J. Write]

Thank you for reading.

[once upon a time]

This is really good!

[J. Write]

Thank you :)