~ Les Eaux Tranquilles

~ Les Eaux Tranquilles, E.L. La France, Coeur, La Poésie, Piano Forte, Europe.....

 

~ Les Eaux Tranquilles

 

 

 

Rendez-vous au crépuscule

L’éclat de votre manteau mouillé

Imprégné de plaisir

De la vie réelle

Vous êtres une belle aurore

En demi-lune bleue

Réflexion qui vous donne le désespoir

Jusqu’à l’espoir d’adeptes

Votre respiration est limpide

Votre coeur parle de partage, de livres

Votre apparence est sacrée

Mais comme toute transition vers soi-même

Vous souriez, liquide

Pour marquer la profondeur du

Silence transformé en

Vraie sagesse, dans les limites

De la puissance pure.

 

~ Elisa Laura

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Now, here is the "remixed" version

Of fellow poet, writer and friend "sithlordjp":

 

~ Les Eaux Tranquilles

 

 

 

Un rendez-vous au crépuscule

Tandis que la dernière lumière recule

Et donne un éclat à votre manteau mouillé

Laissant la trace d’un plaisir imprégné

 

De cette vie longue et réelle

Avant d’atteindre une aurore, douce et belle

Entre nuit et jour, une demi-lune bleue

Une réflexion de désespoir, qui éteint tous les feux

 

Votre espoir d’adepte est fluide

Votre respiration, apaisante et limpide

Votre coeur parle tel un livre partagé

Votre apparence, mystérieuse et sacrée

 

Mais cet état transitoire à l’intérieur de soi

Cache-t-il un sourire liquide qui se noie?

Peut-on atteindre les obscures profondeurs

D’un silence sans écho ni couleur?

 

Vers une vraie sagesse, acquise en murmures

Et la révélation, enfin, d’une puissance pure…

 

-Le 19 février 2013.

 

-D’après un texte original composé par Elisa Laura.

 

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Author's Note

This was a French try for me, and JP was so kindly to play with my words, and give him his thoughts on it, (very inspirational). It is wonderful to learn, and get inspired after a write you wrote by another fellow artist. I want to thank you JP, for all the inspiration, help, and friendship. - Elisa



Thank you
For reading xx

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

Elisa, il semble y avoir beaucoup de secrets, enfermés dans ce mots... Ils se révèlent lentement, juste sous la surface, de ces eaux tranquilles... ''Vous êtes une belle aurore / En demi-lune bleue'' Quelle douce image, une poésie pure. Merci de la partager avec nous....

Merci bien, mon ami, beaux mots.... ici....
:) un sourire des Les/Aux Pays-Bas

Just n ow I posted our version together... thank you for all :) it was a pleasure!

[sithlordjp]

How lovely ! Thanks again for this great opportunity ! I enjoyed this vacation from my mind and my brief stay in yours! :) May we find something to collaborate on at some point down the road!

That would be beautiful my friend... you may always knock my frontdoor, when you have new ideas, I will do the same! :) :)

[Distant horizons]

YUM. This took me a little while to time travel back to French lessons, but was worth it. Liquid smiles and wisdom from silence. Reflection, hope and and a beautiful dawn. A poets paradise.

Oooh so great you understood.... thanks a bunch dear! sometimes in Frensh or Italian I can express it a bit better than in English, but English is lovely-er big time... :) so good to have you by, I'm so grateful for all your lovely comments dear poet.

[Distant horizons]

And my comments are so glad to be able to stop by and say hello to your beautiful words :-)

So sweet, you know, I'm just me, and trying to express myself, it's not everyones taste, but that's more than ok with me :D

[Distant horizons]

You are yYOU-NIQUELY YOU sweetie. And that's a good thing :-)

:-) glad we think out of the box lol :D

[Distant horizons]

:-)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

You can speak French, I'll give you that. I can't even read Frnech. You should have this for English, if you want.

In English this will sound not as beautiful as in frensh, as I tried to explain to Mr. Khalid too beneath... I love experiment with different languages, :) I will translate it for you soon ofcourse... Thank you dear friend, :)

[Pax]

french is a beautiful langauge spoken... as i heard it on tv but didn't understand it... this is a lovely write my friend... beautiful photo and beautiful words... equals wonderful work. :)

Thank you very much Willyam for your words :) they always make me smile.

[khalid]

i hope there was an english translation for it..

Nope, I'm sorry wrote it in French....:)

And out of my mother language Dutch, it would be sounding probably strange in English I guess...

[khalid]

i think you can write the meaning of the words in english...better in arabic if you can lol

Oh yes, inshallah, if I could, I would do it already...... ♥

I just speak fluently, Dutch, English, Italian, Frensh, a bit German, as grammar is almost as difficult as Russian one, *studying Russian for 3 years now) I'm that far I can read cyrillic letters, and translate out of latin meanings." but I want to become better.... busy with my old home language Bahasar Indonesia, (indonesian, or Malasian) and in between I love Turkish, Portugese, and of course Spanish, my roots....

[khalid]

umm multilingual..i have class now..see ya

Just a hobby.... after 8 years normal school, after more school.... be good in class, most important :D

[Sugar Plum ♥]

I love french, even i can`t understand it yet :) i study, but hope i could read it one day!
xx No♥r

:) thanks for being here again dear missed you, till soon xx

[Revery]

Magnifique et passionnée. J'aime les images que vous peignez. Merci de partager mon cher.

Merci cher ami :)

[Corset]

wow, that's a beautiful countryside. One could walk all day in the color of that red. How glorious to opens ones eyes to a sight such as that, thank you for sharing it with us :) Your words have such depth and quiet acceptance, it makes me smile, every tree a welcome shade, the color of love.

Ma gratitude est grande, chère soeur âme ♥

[Tree]

With my limited French I think I was still able to feel the heart of this poem. The peace and solitude, of the countryside, and love. But even if I missed the meaning the words read eloquently and effortlessly from my lips. An incredibly romantic and graceful language

Merci de votre compréhension frère....

Ellie tries to explore every poetic language :)

P.s. you're so close....