~ The Dark and Me

~ The Dark and Me, Elisa Laura

~ The Dark and Me

 

Silver swords sharp as needles,

Pierced my figurative lips,

Of my inner soul,

Into the smallest mosaic pieces -

Left me bleeding in the night,

Without any glue of love,

 

It crossed my deathly feeling,

The long night without a breath;

Outraged and rotting,

Creeping to the throat

Like a punch of voltage,

An claustrophobic explosion

And a silent cry to come;

 

There where I proceeded the dark,

Between the soul and the room;

I saw a body rise;

No more thirsty travels,

Nor to walk, "The Dark"

It slurped out, the internal me...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Wow. This is simply spectacular!
You put a lot of emotion into this piece.

I loved the ending line,
"Nor to walk, "The Dark"
It slurped out, the internal me..."

You are a very vivid writer,
yet the emotions are very strong in your writings.

This is a dramatic, haunting, and beautiful poem.
It cuts through to the soul.
It was extremely suspenseful,
and kept me reading until the end.

Thank you so very much for your review, yes, this was a write from deep down the bottom... your words mean much to me, I like the way you described this dear Feather. :) Many thanks!

[Calissa Knox]

I'm very glad my enjoyment of your masterpiece could bless you, Elisa! :)

Yes, it did, after all darkness felt, there is a little light, :) So happy you enjoyed this. Come back for you, after my dinner tonight ... :D

[Calissa Knox]

It's always good to have light after the darkness. Okay, have a great dinner, Elisa! :)

Thank you dear, I had a great one, just had my home full of friends, who came to surprise me tonight... sigh, had no time to review. Will do as soon as possible... :)

[Calissa Knox]

Sounds really fun! I'm glad you had a great day. :)

It was really fun! thanks a lot, I shall come by when my head is clear, and all there.... x :)

[Calissa Knox]

That's wonderful! Have a great night, Elisa! Hope to talk to you soon. :)

Thankies dearheart, I'm hugging my pillow now, he was never so cute... ;) you to dear, talk, chat, debat soon!!! can't wait xx :)

[s y e]

Dies ist erstaunlich, Eli - ich liebte den Wortlaut und Bilder! ;-) Haha.

This is gothic and romantic, it was amazing. Simply divine. :-D Loving it Eli -- love to see you back!

xx

Haha danke schön meine Schatz! :) Wie so gut Deutsch spricht!

Thank you for your wonderful words my sweetie. :) Love you thanks for all! xoxoxo

[s y e]

Hehe danke schön, gern für sie alle. Es ist mir ein Vergnügen. :) Ich liebe dich auch! xoxoxo

Danke wieder Schatz, für Ihre schönen Worte... viel Liebe und Umarmung ♥ xoxooxox

[s y e]

Sie sind immer willkommen Liebling, viel Liebe zurück xoxo

xxxxxoxoxoxo! :)

[icelandicblue]

The dark is pervasive and persuasive it makes us believe things we wouldn't believe in the light of day. But those nights they are long and lonely and they read into us deeply. This is a very somber piece.

Thank you so much again for your words my sweet friend :) yes, it's a somber one... (my latest are), I hope my quill finds happiness soon :D ((HUG))

[icelandicblue]

Sometimes we need to work our way through the darkness to the light.

Yes, so true... there has been much on my path lately in 10 different things, and I belief in the concept of being "totally rock bottom". :) I face it always... for after there is light. Thanks sweet Anne. x

[David Scott]

Ha. "It slurped out". I love this line. Slurping is usually taking something in. Here you switched it up to show the affect of your darkness within.
Very nice work here Eli!

Exactly that was the contradiction of it ;) my goodness you see all hehe.... Thank you so much dear friend, I'm happy to receive your wonderful reviews always... thanks again x

[Ken Simm.]

Gothic and romantic. This fits all the criteria wonderfully. Especially on this All Hallows Eve.

Aw, thank you so much Ken, good to be back, was going for the grocery's now, but be back tonight to read/review more :)) always happy when you come by!

Oh and Happy Halloween to you my friend (we don't celebrate it pity enough )....

[Ken Simm.]

Celebrate Samhain instead as I do.

Ah the celtic newyear? you mean? :D I will then he he ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

tattooed on the inside with love...we are pierced, we bleed where no one sees, but our words give us away...

and the ink glows just enough for others to read our sorrow.

Thank you my dear friend, it's always a pleasure to see you by! :)

[Frieda P]

I never see you as Dark my friend, but I know we all flounder in the night now and then, your silent cries are heard, another brilliant piece of work, nice to see you back Eli, you've been missed! xo

Si love, 3 AM? ha!!! :D love you so much for saying so, why do you think I started ever , I mean just ever (another would say you're crazy ) a nighty volunteer job, at day sometimes too, but mostly nights...... lol I'm a zombie, I shall be for ever some how ha! I so love you big Sis, missed you tons, hope all is well, get better soon ok? caughing with you love, love you! xx

[Frieda P]

Ha zombies are all the rage, so you're in great style and company....howl at the moon and enjoy my sweet friend. ;-) Baci, love you muchly! ♥♥

Ha! you crack me up, right now you should see me, doing a wild zombie dance, here right at the bus station, lol..... goofbal I am, now that was fun, nobody watched LOL :D xD love yah! till after my shift lol xx baci amore

[Frieda P]

Haha, hey if you're dancing all is right with the world, tango on my sweet................xo

Awwww.... ♥ take my hand love, we should do a Tango, for the women on WC.... :D together :D
shooot I have to get into the bus, ttyl........ x

[Pax]

If there is dark, there will always be light...

In this piece it focus on the dark emotions that built up of a certain moment... I feel like this is a silent screams of the human mind, dark as it may seems, but its a dark expressions of artistic value... I do that often times... by penning it down you'll never lose your balance, because perhaps you've already release those feelings with such artistic value... there is always two sides of a coin, it either we pin both or just the other side, no matter we pen what matters of value, and understand its core...

very well expressed big sis...

Paxie bro, you felt that right....... in this write I was off the world, while I wrote, totally LOCA, crazy..... :) but that's me too.... no shame. I saw things, in a weird construction, I was not psychotic or in influence of any liquor or drugs through, just an over sensitive insomniac high feeling mind.... almost colapsing. Then art probably comes out, lol than you my disease, for giving me art.... ha! thank you so much for your valued thoughts here sweetie, I treasure them xx you mean the world to me.

[Pax]

In the matters of art and emotions, we go crazy as much as insane – emotions goes berserk but we take control and craft it in an artist way. Then that is brilliant way to portray negative emotions… Always a pleasure to read your pieces of art big sis…

[Aethereal]

Now you're inspiring me to think about darkness: I was inspired to write this tiny gift poem for you to keep as your own:

Dark

Without the Dark how high the Moon?
Without a Pause how dull a tune?
Without that Void where light is strewn
nothing would be, nothing would croon.

Aw, dear, thanks so much, you never fail........ so love this.... I've missed your little poems, on mine :D that was astonishing! :) indeed, withouth the dark there's no moon, for the Sun reflects....
'
Indeed, withouth a pause, a musical peace would be out of tune, it would be ADHD....

Withouth the void, there is no light, for it's dark times, that shadow, so beautifully in light, and it gives hope,

And your last sentence made my morning for I was croonin' and that with drinking my coffee....
Thankies dear, you mean the world to me, come back by soon! can't wait I've missed so much :D xx

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! I'll be writing more poems towards the end of November and throughout the Winter into Spring.

I can't wait to read them, seriously, you thought I forgot about the cheese, the mouse, and the cat????? hell no ;) never..... :D keep on penning precious friend. x

[Edgar Perez]

De nada hermosa. I'm glad to know things are brighter for you.
I guess it's safe to say i was in the same position. Still cautious to fully
come out in a comfortable zone emotionally.
I am also still kind of shy about my work, but slowly I have uploaded a few.

But keep blessing us with your beautiful way of arranging words. It's always delightful.
Have a grand night, Eli dream sweet.

Hermano, never be.... I know, I'm too lol, and especially after a break, I am finally writing again after some really hard frustrating struggles, and try to make it whole for me, still I feel all my writings are crap, to the level I was once.... but I will be again there, I never give up you know...

perseverancia lol...... you too hun, dream sweet, my friend, and will come by more! after my duty's here, have to go in a while... had night shift, but must go soon to a next appontment :( after I will sleep :) cuidar de sí mismo, le enviaremos mensajes... amigo beso desde aqui...

[Edgar Perez]

"Outraged and rotting,
Creeping to the throat
Like a punch of voltage"

I was fully captivated after those lines.
It's truly always a delight reading your lovely work.

blessings.

~Edgar Perez

Gracias Mr. Perez, truly, I'm feeling blessed and honored to have you by! I was closed for a while, but slowly getting back on here, this was one out of darker times.... I lived.... I'm feeling happy re-reading it now much more in the light, as when I wrote it.... blessings to you too.... besitos, Eli