~ The Dark and Me

~ The Dark and Me, Elisa Laura

~ The Dark and Me

 

Silver swords sharp as needles,

Pierced my figurative lips,

Of my inner soul,

Into the smallest mosaic pieces -

Left me bleeding in the night,

Without any glue of love,

 

It crossed my deathly feeling,

The long night without a breath;

Outraged and rotting,

Creeping to the throat

Like a punch of voltage,

An claustrophobic explosion

And a silent cry to come;

 

There where I proceeded the dark,

Between the soul and the room;

I saw a body rise;

No more thirsty travels,

Nor to walk, "The Dark"

It slurped out, the internal me...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Wow. This is simply spectacular!
You put a lot of emotion into this piece.

I loved the ending line,
"Nor to walk, "The Dark"
It slurped out, the internal me..."

You are a very vivid writer,
yet the emotions are very strong in your writings.

This is a dramatic, haunting, and beautiful poem.
It cuts through to the soul.
It was extremely suspenseful,
and kept me reading until the end.

Thank you so very much for your review, yes, this was a write from deep down the bottom... your words mean much to me, I like the way you described this dear Feather. :) Many thanks!

[Calissa Knox]

I'm very glad my enjoyment of your masterpiece could bless you, Elisa! :)

Yes, it did, after all darkness felt, there is a little light, :) So happy you enjoyed this. Come back for you, after my dinner tonight ... :D

[Calissa Knox]

It's always good to have light after the darkness. Okay, have a great dinner, Elisa! :)

Thank you dear, I had a great one, just had my home full of friends, who came to surprise me tonight... sigh, had no time to review. Will do as soon as possible... :)

[Calissa Knox]

Sounds really fun! I'm glad you had a great day. :)

It was really fun! thanks a lot, I shall come by when my head is clear, and all there.... x :)

[Calissa Knox]

That's wonderful! Have a great night, Elisa! Hope to talk to you soon. :)

Thankies dearheart, I'm hugging my pillow now, he was never so cute... ;) you to dear, talk, chat, debat soon!!! can't wait xx :)

[DrD]

I don't know if we have a dark side or if life does but whichever, you captured it well here to the point it was recognized by all who experienced it. Very well done with that exact touch of elegance it needed to come across with impact.

Thank you so much my friend, really. I normally don't am like this, but it's maybe out of all the things, lately I've been through, and it had to get out of my quill..... thanks for being here, I shall return the favor soon my friend. I appreciate you.

[wunder]

~”It crossed my deathly feeling,
The long night without a breath;
Outraged and rotting,
Creeping to the throat
Like a punch of voltage,
A claustrophobic explosion
And a silent cry to come”~

~hell-reminds me of the last few weeks-I do love though-
‘ever gorgeous of coarse ~ still - hope things are okay?~ :)

(love that song!)

I hope things are ok with you too my friend... thanks for the loverly review! :)

[wunder]

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[Lydia Shutter]

We all have a dark side. You are comfortable giving us a peek into yours, sweet friend. Haunting emotions expressed so well. I hope it is a bit of a catharis for you to write about your emotions. Knuffels, Lydi**

Thank you love, I can sepparate my hurt fortunately pretty good, I have a thick skin. :) love you my friend. Till so soon!

[joshua deathdealer]

Ha! I love the way you mixed surrealism with stark reality and the how this poem almost seems to boil. I don't know if that makes any sense but it's hot!!

Thank you so much Joshua :) happy face here...

[Deuces]

You paint a vivid picture of the dark reality that exists in all of us, but only few are brave enough to acknowledge. I admire you more with each piece, my friend.

Thank you very much my dear friend... true...

[nostal]

This be some satanic, illuminati conspiracy stuff!

Hehe, thank you Chris, I can tell you I am very in mathematics, and technology,
but this piece was about pure, personal experiences, without paranoid delusional ideas.
And geo-skills ;)

[nostal]

That was a test. You passed.

Aw, I'm so grateful dear xx :)

[Lover Of Words]

A very spine chilling write a way to inspire many of us young ones. But another way with your words have a hard amazing punch to them. Great job lovely

Thanks luv, it's a write pure out of the darker realms I live in right now..... you know it as no other, love, bad health, no future, blegh factor.... ;) thanks for your support, and love, you're dear to me. I shall never forget, and I come slowly by to all..... and for you in more!!!! :D:D

[Lover Of Words]

We both have our struggles lovely one. But know ill be here for you. You are a inspration to me in many ways. You are so strong.

Thank you with whole my heart, I feel humbled x

[Lover Of Words]

No thank you dewe

[Kelly Scheppers]

"Left me bleeding in the night,
Without any glue of love,"

...how poetically correct of you, to bring a relativity of sanity to the darkness!

I've got your back, my friend...through thick and thin. x

♥ Love you Kelly! thanks my all..... you mean the world to me dearest!!! and you're so correct... I've yours too love, always! that's what true friends are for! (((HUGS))) back hopefully soon X

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Eli, this is a dark peek into your world... I felt this to the bones... chilling!!!
You have inspired me to write something dark too...a topic I rarely delve into...
Expressing your artistic perception in this way is a healing process in which I marvel in....
Such talent you have cannot be stifled... even in silence...

Astounding write, Sis!~xoxo~

"Creeping to the throat

Like a punch of voltage,

An claustrophobic explosion

And a silent cry to come;"~ This is hypnotic, love! xxxx

Thank you so much love... you have no idea... xxx

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's always my pleasure, Sis... You're missed!~xoxo~

[Babe Roxx]

Such a lonely and melancholy poem, Elisa, which I'm sure you are feeling in the dark, not roaming free like you would like...your choice words were superb in describing your emotions and your presentation, as always, neatly explosive. Nicely done.

Thank you my friend, a write from out of the dark tunnel ;)

[Babe Roxx]

Lol! Hey, hey, hey, that's my line...you are too Cute, Elisa! You are most welcome. :)