~ The Dark and Me

~ The Dark and Me, Elisa Laura

~ The Dark and Me

 

Silver swords sharp as needles,

Pierced my figurative lips,

Of my inner soul,

Into the smallest mosaic pieces -

Left me bleeding in the night,

Without any glue of love,

 

It crossed my deathly feeling,

The long night without a breath;

Outraged and rotting,

Creeping to the throat

Like a punch of voltage,

An claustrophobic explosion

And a silent cry to come;

 

There where I proceeded the dark,

Between the soul and the room;

I saw a body rise;

No more thirsty travels,

Nor to walk, "The Dark"

It slurped out, the internal me...

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Feel free ;)

Reviews

[Calissa Knox]

Wow. This is simply spectacular!
You put a lot of emotion into this piece.

I loved the ending line,
"Nor to walk, "The Dark"
It slurped out, the internal me..."

You are a very vivid writer,
yet the emotions are very strong in your writings.

This is a dramatic, haunting, and beautiful poem.
It cuts through to the soul.
It was extremely suspenseful,
and kept me reading until the end.

Thank you so very much for your review, yes, this was a write from deep down the bottom... your words mean much to me, I like the way you described this dear Feather. :) Many thanks!

[Calissa Knox]

I'm very glad my enjoyment of your masterpiece could bless you, Elisa! :)

Yes, it did, after all darkness felt, there is a little light, :) So happy you enjoyed this. Come back for you, after my dinner tonight ... :D

[Calissa Knox]

It's always good to have light after the darkness. Okay, have a great dinner, Elisa! :)

Thank you dear, I had a great one, just had my home full of friends, who came to surprise me tonight... sigh, had no time to review. Will do as soon as possible... :)

[Calissa Knox]

Sounds really fun! I'm glad you had a great day. :)

It was really fun! thanks a lot, I shall come by when my head is clear, and all there.... x :)

[Calissa Knox]

That's wonderful! Have a great night, Elisa! Hope to talk to you soon. :)

Thankies dearheart, I'm hugging my pillow now, he was never so cute... ;) you to dear, talk, chat, debat soon!!! can't wait xx :)

[Belle]

" "The Dark"
It slurped out, the internal me..."

Those darks, those needles they can devour and consume us alive.
I like the gothic touch of this write, and the music attached made me stayed a 'il longer.

Thank you Belle, for your support xx :)

[EMMIE]

Ooooohhhhh....I should not have read this right before bed lol! How dark and chilling and creative I LOVE it!!!!

Thank you very much Emmie. :)