~ Illusions?

~ Illusions?, Elisa Laura, What do you know? What do you feel, What do you see? What will you Assume? Illusions, Life, Death, Love, Live, Real, Scribble, Hurt, Facts, Truth, Fake? Time for a change.

~ Illusions?

 

 

Rare dark streets,

The smell of chemicals

Ether hanging in thin air

Hospital odor meets;

 

Dancing on your bed,

Looking at the sky, 

The ceiling lights so high,

Flashing, before your eyes,

Trembling, shaking fled ...

 

Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts, 

Life in your pains…

Silence for a while...

There is a little bit of

Death in your breath...

After each time we've met...

 

 ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music by: Nine Inch Nails - Closer - Instrumental

Enjoy even the darker me. xx

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

Your darkness, to me, is everything. It is the light from which I can always feel you, see you, and know your emotions. This poem reminds me of a song, I mean, it could be one. This piece made me want to smoke a cigarette, but I dare not. My baby will tell me off. You are special.
-x-

Thank you very much dear one... I have the same with your writings, they are all brilliant... Oh and don't smoke ;) he he... you're the best xoxo :)

[Troy Henson]

You delve deep into the dark here and tap into a subconcious element of the mind. Nicely done

Regards

Thank you so much again Troy, I love to write diversity, dark, and fluffiness lol..... xx regards my friend.

[Pax]

There is a little bit of
Death in your breath...
After each time we've met...

~This make me really sad big sis... In the imagery you put in this piece makes me think of you in the hospital bed. Resting from all the medicine the nurses had just given you. I remember the time my mother was in the hospital bed. The time when the cancer cells gets complicated. That was too much for me. Fearing that death is just a door step. Hope your doing alright this holiday season. Bless your day ahead, stay healthy and keep fighting a good fight.

Thank you very much for the most heartfelt review, dear little brother. I'm so sorry to hear this one brought you memories back of your mother... ((hugs)) I try my best, :) I know you do too, Bless you too dear one, and we chat soon! I will, like you I'm a survivor xx thank you... for all

[Paul Seaman]

Call the Nurse !! Actually very nice. Evokes chilling memories we all know.

Thank you again Paul, I do appreciate your thoughts :) shall come back soon for your art !

[MsJewel]

I have only read your beautifully soft poetry - and to find something this dark and chilling was such a surprise... Your talent is amazing Elisa.

Your poem left me with a chill.. You do dark very well.

:) Julie

Thank you with whole my heart Julie :) for your sweet words to me. xx have a nice weekend! :)

[Scott Metro]

I taste pain
Dark and brooding.
Excellent

Thank you Scott, for coming by to one darker piece of my writing. Means a lot... yes, there is pain in this one :)

[redzone]

"life in your pain".. now there is a "dark" thought.... sometimes I think we do live within our pain, it defines us... then I go for a walk in the woods smell nature, talk to trees and sigh.. oh NIN and their song "Closer" is a favorite song.. "I want to feel you on the inside".. anyway, nice read, from a "darker you".. Thanks Elisa ~~redzone

Thank you so much again redzone, for this lovely review. I truly appreciate it, I have my darker writes in between... now and then, they just need to come out ;) glad you liked this one. I have subscribed to you, so I will catch up on your artworks, just now not home, and on phone... :)

[redzone]

not sure, but what does "subscribe" mean, should I worry? lol ;o) teasing..

I took a abonnement on your writing, so when you post something new on here, I don't miss a thing :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stellar stuff, even if it's darker version of the Elisa I know and love.

Aw, great you love this one too, many thanks... I'm experimenting all the edges of my brain lately ;) when home later tonight, I plan on reviewing you too and others, great to have your words by my friend.

[Kenneth The Poet]

not a problem at all.

[Samuel Jack]

Nice poem!..........well not nice, but a good poem :)

I felt like it told the story of someone visiting their friend who is a heroin addict.

The last stanza is pure class.

Normally I like to congratulate people in their native tongue, but reading your "about me" section I have absolutely no idea which language to use!! I thought I was cool been half English,half Irish, but you've got MULTIPLE heritages!

शुक्रीया बहुत धन्यवाद. दोस्त. So I used a language neither of us can probably read.

Thank you so much, I find it so original of you to speak to me in I think Hindi :) my home language is Dutch :) Thank you for this most great review... yeah, I'm a kind of a mongrel lol :)

[Samuel Jack]

Ha! Hindi,spot on. Next language...............your only clue is it's a song :)

Калинка, калинка, калинка моя!
В саду ягода малинка, малинка моя!
Ах! Сосенушка ты зеленая,
Не шуми же надо мной!
Ай, люли, люли, ай, люли, люли,
Не шуми же надо мной!

Eén taal is nooit genoeg :)

Such a beautiful Cyrillic Kalinka... :) ♫ Right, spot on, one isn't enough ;)

[Samuel Jack]

Can't put a glove on you, I'm no omniglot, I admit it alright! :( I googled most of it, except the Russian. One last go...........

నా హోవర్ఁక్రాఫ్ఠ్ అంతా ఈలు చేపలతో నిండిపోయింది
(naa hoavarkraapht aṅthaa eelu chaepalathoa niṅdipoayiṅdhi)

Gave you the anglo version to help you out ;)

Could this one be a dialect? :) I just don't know ha! but it's fun!

[Samuel Jack]

I can't even remember which language I cut and pasted :) I think it's Tagalog or something. I can tell you that the phrase in English is "my hovercraft is full of eels"

Tagalog is the language from the Philipines, I thought more of a dialect from India, but I could be wrong ofcourse ;) he he...

[Tom]

Death by a thousand cuts !

A psychological, poetic parallax !!

Wohaaa now that's a different interpretation, but I like it though, thank you so much! :)

[Abeer until dawn]

Oh, my .... Your words are full of pain, searching for a road leads to another lost reality .. though, who decides what's real and what's not !

Beautiful put of words, Elisa
.. I really enjoyed your darkness

Thank you very very much Abeer, I appreciate it! It's nice what "you" got out of it. :) xo