~ Illusions?

~ Illusions?, Elisa Laura, What do you know? What do you feel, What do you see? What will you Assume? Illusions, Life, Death, Love, Live, Real, Scribble, Hurt, Facts, Truth, Fake? Time for a change.

~ Illusions?

 

 

Rare dark streets,

The smell of chemicals

Ether hanging in thin air

Hospital odor meets;

 

Dancing on your bed,

Looking at the sky, 

The ceiling lights so high,

Flashing, before your eyes,

Trembling, shaking fled ...

 

Needles in your arms,

Blood through your veins,

Darkness in your thoughts, 

Life in your pains…

Silence for a while...

There is a little bit of

Death in your breath...

After each time we've met...

 

 ~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Music by: Nine Inch Nails - Closer - Instrumental

Enjoy even the darker me. xx

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

Your darkness, to me, is everything. It is the light from which I can always feel you, see you, and know your emotions. This poem reminds me of a song, I mean, it could be one. This piece made me want to smoke a cigarette, but I dare not. My baby will tell me off. You are special.
-x-

Thank you very much dear one... I have the same with your writings, they are all brilliant... Oh and don't smoke ;) he he... you're the best xoxo :)

[emmajoy]

Everything seems to be enlarged - almost like a scene from Alice.. or worse, a surreal painting where life is distorted and, even worse in a way, so are emotions. A muddle of light and dark, good and bad, love and .. not quiite hatred but deeply etched doubt. Intense phrasing, a series of moving pictures .. '.. Needles in your arms, ~ Blood through your veins, ~ Darkness in your thoughts, ~ Life in your pains…Silence for a while... '
Almost a nightmare feel, too clearly felt..

Lovely words, Em, raw, and honest, love them. We should not be afraid of every mood, and change in life. Like you said, it brings out the best in us... ;) much love, and thanks a lot! xo

[sharonlee]

Potent thread Elisa!

Hugs and Blessings

Thank you luv, it were one of the darker ones.... after a lot of lighter ones ;) Hugssss and love!

[Baby Ricochet]

I really like this one. There's great imagery and mood to it

Thank you very much Baby :) good to see you again!

[Muse]

ha ha ha

"you know I like"

I felt you were dancing on death's back. Mocking him. But perhaps breathing is like mocking our mortality. We never know when that next breath "could be our last."

Ha, I told you, I would listen to NIN in the car lol... ;) thank you dear one. Yes, I danced on death's back... slipped out, and am still here :) x

[realmwriter]

The darkest sides of life seem to be represented here in so few words that it borders on madness. That in itself is brilliant. "There is a little bit of death in your breath after each time we've met..." My favorite line for sure. Love this piece.

Oh thank you so much for your wonderful comment my friend, hope all is well with you xo :)

[realmwriter]

All is well and I wish the same for you...

So glad to hear. :) I shall come by for your new ones as soon as I can, have missed your stuff! :D

[realmwriter]

I haven't wrote much as of late. Ive had a rough patch or two along the way and my inspiration to write has suffered from it. But I will get back there and post a flurry of new poems.

Oh, I'm sorry to hear that, I know exactly what you mean... here the same. ;) No rush though, I will check frequently on you. :) wishing you my best.

[PearlPoet]

I did not see this one coming from you!!!!! Such a dark theme, such an elaboration of loosing life, tainted with NIN!!!!!

"Silence for a while...

There is a little bit of
Death in your breath...
After each time we've met..."

You just ripped my soul out and through it all the way..? ????


I wish to sit down with you eye to eye and talk about this poem.. ~hugs~

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I have much more dark poems, on here, they are just in between the fluffy ones ;-) You can ask me always anything about my writings in private... thanks for being here. xo

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You are the (I) of the storm, dear poet

You have that right dear one, all is one connection in this... :) x

[Caradoc]

....I hate hospitals. What a dark and depressing poem. This brings back painful memories...

Well written though.

-Caradoc

Thank you very much my dear.... I appreciate your thoughts, and story towards this.... x

[Caradoc]

As always, you are welcome.

[David Scott]

The last stanza is a little spooky...
I see a fight in the fading light of a long day.
We all push through adversity. Still, it is our own and it always takes the depth of our inner strength.

I am thinking Eli...

I love to see (((YOU))) thinking... truly. I shall explain this write to you one day ;) thank you so much for these thoughts. They mean much...

[David Scott]

Well, I do see a medical condition.
I could explore a drug addiction, but I don't see that with you.

More like fighting a disease brought on by smoking or cultural and personal habits.
I could even see asthma. But the possibilities are endless.
All we can do is fight now. We all must overcome adversity. Nobody escapes.

I was trying to be careful and not meddle. ;)

Thank you ;) great you don't see that with me, for that's truth. :) I love the second assumption very much. I know you are, and don't worry, every opinion can be named here, all is welcome... x