i have seen you this way before

i have seen you this way before

A Poem by victoria

my dear friend,
i saw your notes
you write to him
i saw your heart
you are broken
i saw you cry
but not from laughter
i saw you scared
and it was a disaster
i saw you hurt
and i became broken
i saw the pain
and thought of nothing
i saw you love
two men at once
i saw you try 
to be their only one
i saw you happy
and i started gleaming
i saw you cheerful
and i started beaming
i saw you many ways
and now you all the above
i see you child
and i just came to say,
please,
done fade away
and don't be to hurt
to turn the world grey.



you got to 2 guys, and you get double the pain!
i cant stand to see you hurt.....no not again!
please child,
move on from your "boo"
you need to see that he not only has you,
but he has HER too!
you can not take him away from her
and i know that angers you, but honey,
he just gonna keep playing you
WTF DONT YOU SEE!??!?!?
stop kissing him before your dateing him
stop showing yourself off.
they should show themselves to you.
then you know who loves you too.

© 2011 victoria


Author's Note

victoria
its only cuz i love you....


sorry for the mistakes ..its not the best but..
enjoy!!

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i know i cant take him away from her but trust me victoria i have tryed so hard to give him up like kim said hes a bad drug that i cant quit no matter how hard i try like all the memories bring me back and every time i see him it gets stronger and i just love him like its basicly impossible for me to stop. i love you so much and i get what your seeing but i just cant do it. who did i kiss befor i dated Nick? i wasnt planning on going out with him lmao he kept kissing me and i felt bad so i didnt pull away or anything. and yeah i know i know stop with showing off what i got just to get with zach i understand but thats the only way i think and i know i shouldnt wanna be wth him if he only likes me cause i got big b***s and an a*s but i really like him too and he was the one that i was gonna start a thing with to get off my "boo" this all really sucks and i know you think i should take a break and technicly i am cause i cant get with either of them so yeah this sucks mad a*s for me thanks vicky for all you do i love this poem it was amazing. i hope that if people read my review they understand that this was about me lmaoo that would be strange if they didnt;) kay love ya byeee

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I can hear in your words how much you love this person. Best of luck, I hope everything turns out okay. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful meaningful piece. So much heartfelt emotion within every line. Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is very powerful and very meaningful. The message is to clear and everyone who reads it can understand it. Another thing, mistakes dont matter to me because everyone makes mistakes. I can see past mistakes and see the real meaning of this piece which was obviously dedicated to one your friends. I have actually had to say something like this to one of my close friends and I almost broke down in tears because I hate seeing people I care about hurt. This is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was so nice :D
great work :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


I wasn't caring about the mistakes...The meaning behind this poem is more important for me...You seem to be a really dedicated and nice friend...This is beautiful. Very straight-forward...Well done..
:)))

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i know i cant take him away from her but trust me victoria i have tryed so hard to give him up like kim said hes a bad drug that i cant quit no matter how hard i try like all the memories bring me back and every time i see him it gets stronger and i just love him like its basicly impossible for me to stop. i love you so much and i get what your seeing but i just cant do it. who did i kiss befor i dated Nick? i wasnt planning on going out with him lmao he kept kissing me and i felt bad so i didnt pull away or anything. and yeah i know i know stop with showing off what i got just to get with zach i understand but thats the only way i think and i know i shouldnt wanna be wth him if he only likes me cause i got big b***s and an a*s but i really like him too and he was the one that i was gonna start a thing with to get off my "boo" this all really sucks and i know you think i should take a break and technicly i am cause i cant get with either of them so yeah this sucks mad a*s for me thanks vicky for all you do i love this poem it was amazing. i hope that if people read my review they understand that this was about me lmaoo that would be strange if they didnt;) kay love ya byeee

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I only saw one mistake in the whole piece "done fade away
and don't be to hurt"
'done' should be 'don't'
Other than that minor thing I thought it was a great piece and you wrote it very well! The emotion behind it was penned perfectly and I could easily see the character showing these emotions. You did a great job, and I liked how you changed the font color for the second half of the piece. It caught my eye, drew in my attention, and definitely gave the piece some uniqueness to it as well. Great job!


Posted 7 Years Ago


I like it! The message is clear and powerful, good job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Passionate and powerful piece...
great :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


You're poem brings to light one of the worst things a female can do. It never ever turns out positively. Best as you have stated with in, she needs to lose one of them.

A harsh truth you put to ink and one that infers much about parts of our social society and it's flaws.

Great Ink!
Aaron

Posted 7 Years Ago



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