Scabs

Scabs

A Story by Xuru
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An open letter from husband to estranged wife.

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I'm sugar rushed and need a transfusion out of this wine induced haze, a cool breeze whips through my hair and I feel weightless.

Flying on the breath of a lie, words hollowed out and lined with X's and O's brimming at the seams. Upon closer inspection the words are not words at all, and the threads have caught.

Stray once again I howl through the streets like the mad man I've always wanted to be, descending down the backs of wallflowers shuddering under my gaze, looking to find you once again.

© 2017 Xuru


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I like the metaphors and the word play in this one. It is a well written piece of poetry. I'm not much of a poetry guy and am kinda new to the genre. But i like this one.

Posted 1 Year Ago


simply beautiful great use of words and emotions , Iloved it

Posted 1 Year Ago


This packs a powerful punch of tender emotion. Thank you for sharing, it's really well done. Although it doesn't have much context, I was still able to feel the vibrations of what you felt when you wrote this.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Powerful use of words and thoughts, you make the reader believe the journey and the need in the words. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing story.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Very strong but gentle words
Loved it

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Cae
I really love how simple this is, but how deep and personal it is as well. I love the strength of the emotions you put into this and the imagery that you've created.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Xuru

3 Years Ago

I'm glad you got something out of it.
lovely. i like the concept. keep it up.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Xuru

3 Years Ago

Thank you David.
Well penned! It's strong with emotion and I enjoyed the imagery. I would call this a poem even though it's telling a story. Very impressive piece!
Tabby

Posted 3 Years Ago


Xuru

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the read Tabby.
Such a wonderful letter. "Upon closer inspection the words are not words at all, and the threads have caught. " Such a turnout. I like it very much. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Xuru

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
You've done great. My only suggestion is to add a comma after "X's" in your second paragraph to distinguish that that X's are lined, and the O's are brimmed. Naturally, most people will just read it X's and O's as if their together.

This is wonderfully done. Thanks for sharing.

Edit: Upon reading it over again, I miss read the X's and O's part and realize that both the X's and O's are both brimming at the seams. My apologies.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Xuru

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the constructive criticism nonetheless Joe.

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Added on May 29, 2017
Last Updated on August 29, 2017
Tags: Story, poem, prose, love, life, letters, relationships, lies

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