Ravens

This little boy can't understand what he wants.
His mind too crowded with too many thoughts
This little raven, can't make up his mind.
Denying the fact that he's a little too blind.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's risen above.
These ravens so mischievous.
There seems to be no end to this.

See, this little boy, oh raven of mine.
How I wish you saw that little girl shine.
Whenever you made your big debut.
But things are starting to look so new.

This little girl so stuck in love,
With the little boy who's grown up,
With these ravens so in love.
But to the little boy, this isn't enough.

This young gentleman so stuck in isolation.
Ever so sweet, ever so young, you're her creation.
She's so willing to fly away with you.
But you're so protective of her value.

This young lady with desires to be free,
With the young gentleman who cannot see.
The ravens becoming so much more.
But knows the consequences of gambling before.

Reviews

[Ruth]

There is consequence to everything, this shows that beautifully!
Powerful poem love
xx

[StacyPerry]

nicely wirtten

[D S Rollins]

Good balance of rhyme, and I love the language use. Nice write.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Well written, just enough rhyme.. it flows well, easy reading.
It is metaphoric and melancholy .. very nice. I enjoyed it.

Chloe

[Daniel R Booyer]

Sad, but beautifully written. Nicely done :)

[kylie]

Wow....
You did a fantastic job here! It flows perfectly, and there is a beat to it.
Often times we do not interperate poems right because they have nothing to them but breaks and rhyms, but this absolutely came to life in my mind.

The literal meaning is beautifully writen, I love the story behind it. This is by far one of my favorites I have read so far.