Let Go

Relax

Hear the laughter,

See the sun,

Feel the breeze,

Now hold it all close,

And breathe...

Laugh with the laughter,

Smile back at the sun,

Be swayed to and fro...

Now let your soul breathe,

And just let go...

Author's Note

Let me know

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I like this poem. It speaks of something that I have been pondering recently. It speaks of being in nature as opposed to watching nature. I find simple to be elegant and this is an example. You didn't try to write in grand prose. You were elegantly simple in your word choices.

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

This is officially my favourite!!!!!

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I like this one. Its very simple but it has the care-free whimsy that is perfect for this poem. Good write!

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

The below sums it up.

Excellent refreshing poetry! :)

[Mike Espinosa]

Interesting. Your simple commands read quickly and well.

I think you can break this into at least two stanzas after the ellipses.

"Be swayed to and fro..." by what? I know you mean the breeze, but you mentioned the laughter and sun again, so why not mention the breeze again? It would help that repetition you're going for in the other lines.

[Colm]

This is really relaxing and uplifting. Nice one. One thing I would say is that instead of the three dots after the last line maybe put them after breathe on the second last line, just a thought.

[Crowley]

You have just made me relax on this Monday morning. Nice poem to wake up to and to let myself give up control. Good stuff sweet, I liked it.

[Dutch Jr.]

I'm such a fan of this simple, yet direct and to-the-point poetry. You write them very well. Great job.

[Michael X]

adora, you have a great way with words, you should stop wastng
your talent on cliches. focus on original metphors and words
people rarely interpret in poetry. because you are an awsom3 my friend,
but these mediocre analogies don't do you enough justice.

[Tate Morgan]

A breath of fresh air