A Poem by Faye




 In spring the tree blossoms anew.

Come summer the sun's light shines on leaves,

very bright.

Autumn turn's leaves to the sky's colour,

before night.

Lastly winter, leaves the tree's bare!


© 2010 Faye

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Author's Note

Never really tried a syllable count before.

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This is a beautiful poem. I love how the 3rd and 5th lines rhyme. And that's a pretty awesome picture, too. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

It comes together nice. It's really a nice poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I like this. What do you think of switching the order of the first two words in the last line, so it reads "Winter lastly leaves the trees bare"? Then you get some alliteration in there, as well as the cool assonance with "trees" and "leaves" ?"
I actually didn't notice the syllable count, but I did notice the rhyming! And the nice idea of the leaves turning the color of an evening sky...maybe you could expand on that some?

Posted 11 Years Ago

Great job. A little poem with a lot of imagery :) I liked it!

Posted 11 Years Ago

It went well. It flowed for me

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on June 26, 2010
Last Updated on July 8, 2010



Lincolnshire, United Kingdom

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