Pickled Scenery

Pickled Scenery

A Poem by S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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A huge Alsatian barks at a passerby stranger
as the pond geese honk sensing grave danger
Trudges back home a rangy lone ranger.

Big and little aubergines cast a purple shade
In the twilight birdsong begins to fade
Night makes navy-blue of the greenery's jade.

Wolves howl in the distance
Panthers prowl near pig pens
Ocelots growl around the dens.

Dolphins perform in the aquatic circus
Kids count on the time-old abacus
All in all the miracle of creation's fabulous

Elsewhere the morn dawns upon wee ladybirds
And shepherds go about grazing their hungry herds.

A rare sight of starfishes settle upon beach pebbles
Pink salmon in a see-through lake breath out bubbles
Bombed by tech; corpses found in debris and rubbles!

Wild species lurk in the murky forest
Stands tall and hovering high mount Everest
A chance to enjoy nature at its very best!

Admit it O' mankind no one can ever be
at par with your and my versatile Creator
The billions of species is far too extraordinary
He single-handedly created all that variety in nature.

For even the smart human who invented the radio
did not as well model the computer.
The one who designed my dresser couldn't design my patio
It'd be rare for a shoemaker to also be a tutor  

But God He made both ant and elephant
and there's absolutely nothing that He can't.

© 2023 S.zaynab.kamoonpury


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S.zaynab.kamoonpury
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Good writing. Enjoyed reading your poem ☺️

Posted 7 Months Ago


Truth!
As I started reading this wonderful poem, it reminded me of a failed attempt at a similar poem. But not enough to take my mind's eye off this imagery and journey through it. I LOVED your ending. I believe it whole-souled. Wonderfully explained and expressed. Tyfs

Posted 11 Months Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

11 Months Ago

Um i think you would've written even better, english is your language, u can't fail in attempt. Im .. read more
Your poetry is full of playful enthusiasm and rich with color.
My heart is very much in harmony with your line which reads
"Admit it O' mankind no one can ever be
at par with your and my versatile Creator."

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

S.zaynab.kamoonpury

11 Months Ago

Warm thanks for lofty comment, liking those lines, . God bless,
'tis so true. The fingernail on a newborn baby always grabs me. --- thanks!

Posted 1 Year Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Thanks soo much for a thought-provoking great comment,
passerby stranger
Night makes navy-blue of the greenery's jade.
time-old abacus
creation's fabulous

just so many great/inventive use of twisting language
well done ... an enjoyable read that gave great pause for reflection

kool so very kool!


Posted 1 Year Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Thanks soo much for cool super feedback poet!
All creatures big and small touched upon in this well written poem. The rhyming is superb and your spirituality comes through loud and clear. From the oceans to the deserts to the forests. Indeed, it is difficult not to believe there is a greater power than man. Good one. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Aw, my warmest thanks for your bright heart-warming thoughts on this poem, im so glad you are of tho.. read more
It may be rare for a shoemaker to be a tutor but a carpenter was once the greatest teacher the world has ever known. But that wasn't just rare, it was singular. I enjoyed the read from start to finish and it's clear a lot of thought went into it. I appreciate the perspective of the author as well. Fine work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Oh yeah you must be meaning Jesus, but i said rare not impossible, Jesus was a rare case indeed. read more
Well without going into the context but rather the poetry I would say you've got a handle on something here "Night makes navy-blue of the greenery's jade."...something in that line speaks to me a fan of Neruda and that speaks volumes poet. As to who put it there well another discussion for another site. This is rich in something that sings of poetry. Something that reaches over the wall of prose and tangles into the welcome walk of poetry and you need faith ..It is why I use the handle of Perdition which speaks to most poets in understanding that poetry is a living hell. The most wonderful of gifts in seeing what is there that most cannot but that is what makes it the gift so rare. We are granted by way of constant commitment or transcendence perhaps. But like Bukowski suggested, " Don't Try" and "Go all the way or not at all". Unfortunately, that means a lot of sleepless nights.if not the muse at three am or straight insomnia...lol. I enjoyed reading this and your praise of the wild is good. Leave a little room for us the viruses as well might be my only criticism ...and here I said " not going into the context"...well, I tried but it's been another sleepless night overtop the pages so apologies" It's claiming w.out claiming; your poetry that is. Well done and a pleasure to read. Thank you for the suggestion

Posted 1 Year Ago


S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Hii, glad i was online so i could reply you faster.
I have heard of famous Neruda but haven'.. read more
Perdition

1 Year Ago

But it's the only way through? lol. And take some time, read the man!! Smiles. Suggestions too nume.. read more
S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Yes of course i will read him, he's not a famous poet for nothing, there's reason why he's one of th.. read more
A sweeping picture of nature here, accompanied by a spiritual message. Despite mankind's considerable abilities, it is not the highest power in the universe.

Posted 1 Year Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

I like how you phrased your comment so eloquently with truth yay thanks soo much for your fine thoug.. read more
I love the description and you make the poem sound sophisticated but yet simple.
I dig it!!!! great work



Posted 1 Year Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

S.zaynab.kamoonpury

1 Year Ago

Warmest thanks for your lovely cool feedback, i do aim for simple but try my best it shouldn't be b.. read more
Ursa major

1 Year Ago

and it wasn't boring at all! the longevity it gives to the poem makes it flow.

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