Thoughts of you

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

Reviews

[Devons]

I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

[Charles]

What can I add to the earlier 32 reviews except more praise. This poem is very nicely done - rich in internal rhyme, end rhyme, meter and metaphor. Everything a poem should be. I wonder about the punctuation in the first line (and repeated in the 5th stanza)... it's not wrong but colons are hard things to deal with in poetry and a colon and dash in the same sentence makes it stand out (just a thought). I find the phrase 'he stops to run' a bit incongruous - contradictory thoughts: stopping and running. The only other comment is that 'smiley winks' is a bit trite for a poem that is so well crafted otherwise. This is a great effort on your part and will find its way to my library. :-)

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Good. I luved the line- 'my smiles...smiley winks' that scored!

[Saadia]

a wonderful wonderful poem. so smooth in its flow, words just float on the theme. gives the feeling of the seven romanticists, i am so glad to read u after a long time, keep writing always :)

[Lucy Joan]

You've obviously recieved so many more reviews before mine, and I don't know what else to add to the others' comments of praise. But I must say, this poem is one of the most awe-inspiring piece of balladries i've ever read.
"The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you."
Absolutely brilliant. Your choice of words are so thoughtfully crafted to form sonorously sweet lines over the pursuit of love. Like everyone else, I'm completely enchanted and I believe your poem is tantamount to the beauty of some of the world's most valued poets. Awesome job! ^^

[Alicante lullaby]

your rhyming was surreal ...

[Nirmala]

How refreshing and enjoyable this poem was. I particularly liked
The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon of eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.
The delicate and gentle verses are radiating love and affection

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.
Wow!

[Adarsh]

I have already talked to you about the poem and how you put me at loss of words when you pen down something THIS elegant. It flows and fills our hearts and minds like a beautiful song and keeps echoing there. And again each and every line is So Beautiful. So soothing. Every time I read the poem it seems more meaningful to me than the last time and I love it even the more. :)

I believe I have said this before and am doing it again -
"I admire your writes and they inspire me!"

[An owl on the moon]

Your form and flow are exquisite, and the richly colorful emotion beautifully paints each line. There is a lifting, sunrise feel to the love shared. Wonderfully voiced!

[FlawedByDesign]

Like passion roaming the skies,
You've unchained your love and let it fly.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. " - is out of this world.

Extremely beautiful; the flow, the rhyme, and the rhythm they produce, just outstanding.

Nicely done.

[The Analog Kid]

Very intense "love" poem. This is done my way. Great word choices. Great word choices too! Kicks a*s!