Soul Weakness

"I was five years old,

I fell off my bike for trying the first time,

I was seven years old,

When I first made a friend,

I was eight years old,

When my parents got a divorce,

I was Nine years old,

When I had my first crush,

I was Eleven years old,

When my mother put my father in jail,

I was Thirteen years old,

When I had my first kiss,

I was Fourteen years old,

When my eighteen year old boyfriend raped me,

I was Sixteen years old,

When my best friend threw me a sweet sixteen,

I was Seventeen years old,

When my brother was sent to a mental institution,

I was Twenty,

When my boyfriend proposed to me,

I was Twenty-four,

When my two year old baby died of cancer,

I was Twenty-six,

When my father got out of jail,

I was Twenty-eight,

When my husband left me, knowing I'm no good"

 

"Than why were you happy all your life, til now?" He asked

"I wasn't, thats why I'm here"

"It's been the worst 28 years a person can possibly have" She went on

"What about all the time I gave you happiness?" he asked

"Happiness?" she smirked

"Try it again" as God put her soul into a new body, to re-live her mistakes.

Reviews

[Catonia06]

Wow..:O

I'd love to see you do a story/novel.I bet I'd love it :D

[vincentbals]

cool perspective ... i really liked it. good job! keep it up!

[Rory CJ Frankson]

I especially liked the last line... the rest was really good, and heavy. Rather shocking to pentrate layers of maybe, needed healing. Sorrows, and remorseful event. A gambit of emotive life event... ran me through the ringer really and remind me of some of my pesonal trials.

[Hailey]

Wow. This was amazing, it has everything a poem should.
The best thing about this poem? The strength of the emotion and the number of emotions it makes you feel. One moment you're thinking awwww! The next moment that awwww! is shot down immediately. Full of shock, happiness, anger, disappointed... This has everything. Very good job.