Next Time.. Care

Next Time.. Care

A Poem by CherryBomb
"

If you cared, I couldve saved you

"

Your my one desire,

I wish you for my all entire,

I used to be your secret admire,

Secrets free,

Can't wait for you to see,

You're all I'v ever wished for,

All I ever dreamed,

If you showed some appreciation,

You could've lived to see tomorrows dawn,

No hard feelings,

We would be at heavens sake,

Together,

© 2010 CherryBomb


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i like your rhyme scheme...because it isn't totally predictable yet it flows forward with its own little dance

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice love poem :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


this was so smooth
i liked the way the poetry flowed
so much emotion
i saw the images
taking me up and back to earth
lovely

Posted 13 Years Ago


impressive

Posted 13 Years Ago



Having a crush could lead into some "CRUSH!!"...
i like the way you keep it subside and cool...

Posted 13 Years Ago


Aww, what a sweet poem! I really liked the honesty and vulnerability that came across in this piece, and how the emotions seemed to escalate and strengthen as the poem progressed. There were a few typos/grammatical mistakes, and I found the commas to be a little distracting, but other than that, this was a great write! I really loved the way you ended this poem. The last two lines were beautiful. :)
~PaperHearts


Posted 13 Years Ago


You can only do so much to make things sweet for someone else before it starts to rob precious things from your relationship. Appreciation, respect and trust are so important. I like this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like this it has pure emotion

Posted 13 Years Ago


A different kind of poem. Not as flowing as some, but it works.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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CherryBomb

Brooklyn, NY



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