HIT YOUR GOAL

Don't let your dreams fade 

Love can defeat hate 

Time is just a thief 

Steals happiness and leaves you in grief 

Live like you will die tomorrow 

So don't let yourself die in sorrows 

Forget what you have lost and learn to move on 

No one can break you as long as they know you are strong 

Learn from your mistakes 

But don't let them break you 

Just be real and pure 

So that no one can make you insecure 

Don't give a damn what other people say 

Cause you are beautiful in your own way 

Be the star of your own sky 

You are always a winner as long as you try 

Open your heart and free your soul 

And when the time comes hit your goal 

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great job with metrica, I guess I can say without problems, that (at least for the people I know) you're the "queen of the couplets in WC", you just write them so naturally and superbly at the same time. The flow is amazing, and it doesn't hurt AT ALL watching you finally write a "good mood type" of poem !! You make such great works when you do it !!

[Phillitup]

Beautiful...

[MOON]

Beautiful write afra great flow.

[AnoudQ]

OMG amazing poem... it becomes one of my Favorite poems,, Nice and amazing loved it a lot keeeeeep going girl *.*^

[Damien Davison]

Inspiring and easy to read. Full of motivating affirmatives. Good job!

[Jason]

Wow, just loved this. Great job.

[Allen Smuckler]

Way to go afra....a good pep talk to oneself and words to live by..
now comes the hard part....................doing them.....even some of them.
Easier said then done...
I liked the flow and the rhyme scheme even though you couldn't get mistakes and breaks to folllow the pattern.....doesn't really matter, but I would have worked harder to get it to work...ie, though my heart sometimes breaks )or my body, or my soul, or my being....or maybe, I'm just being too critical and it should be left alone
Just a subtle suggestion afra and not a deal breaker....it certainly works as is..
very good write
allen

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem read through my mind as a song. I found it very lyrical and it inspired me.
I'd love to hear it set to a track. Beautiful work.

[Steven]

It's like one bad hallmark card after another! You're pretty though.

[Shaun Fisher]

That poem feels good like a warm cup of porridge smothered over the glowing belly of a pregnant shemale