a different reflection

A different Reflection

 

Vision is gone from me

Emotion now drives this train

My heart for your heart

Is the only way that I can remain

Same crime, different time

Same punishment I ask for me

One with the heart, one with the head

Wrong seemed right at least in the vision that I see

I got hungry for love

I hungered so I ate

Problem was

I ate off another’s plate

Consumed in the have nots

I only thought about me

And gave my time to someone

That didn’t make me feel ugly

The mirror lied to me

And made me search for a different reflection

It made me seek outside of myself

For love and affection

Now fear consumes me

It’s hard to be honest with myself

Because that means being honest with you

I fear that if I do, we would have nothing left.

 

after vision

 

Reviews

[Sam Severn]

This is one heartbreaking n' heartchurningly honest poem, aftervision! You hold nothing back, and you show both love n' huge regret. My favorite rhyme is:
"I got hungry for love/I hungered so I ate/Problem was/I ate off another’s plate"...
FABULOUS STUFF! ㋡

[TTBoy28]

Vision is gone from me/The mirror lied to me...wonderfully done! The last two words are out of place though. Good job!

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Sounds like some very serious moral issues going on here..I hope that this is just a topic about adultery not life(I ate off another's plate)...Keep the creative and controverital pen flowing...Sara

[Desert Dreamer]

Wonderful! Reminder to be honest in love, I am having many thoughts. Thank you for sharing.

[Journey]

Interesting. Sometimes it is even hard to be honest with yourself. The battles that go on in the mind can be disheartening.

"It’s hard to be honest with myself
Because that means being honest with you"

[Ruth]

This is a great poem, I like the flow a lot, it carries nicely:) Wonderful write! xx

[Gheeneil]

The battle between the head and the heart is never new to anyone. Each has its own perception on things and on life. Once one sees by the heart, chances are masks will be taken off; the mystery will be unfold. But, the thing is, it'll give him room for vulnerability and we know, that it always seems safe, if part of oneself is partly hidden. That's how things go. we're used to hiding. True enough, the head (thru the eyes) will always find ways to peek and have its say as to provide comfort zone. Keep writing.

[deeps]

This is wonderful, I really enjoyed this emotional write.
You put alot into thsi write. This is really touching in a
beuatiful kind of way. Awesome write.

[Simpleasures]

Wow, I don't even know how I feel about this piece. "Now fear consumes me It's hard to be honest with myself Because that means being honest with you I fear that if I do, we would have nothing left." I guess if being honesty leaves nothing, then there was nothing to begin with. Another interesting write, poet.