21/08/16

Fleeting Thoughts #1

All the hotel receipts are fading

along with the structure of your face,

as I stay here pacing;

Your face melting in my hands.

Author's Note

Just random thoughts while I'm going about life. Didn't really have the time to elaborate on it.

Also first thing posted on here!! I don't even know if I'm doing this right.

Reviews

[Rahul]

ur "fleeting feelings" taste surprisingly quite gud. u must continue writing such juxtapositions of ur montage memories under "Fleeing Feel Diary" or as a Red Journal. it could be turn into somehing.. of courses as killer (beautious) as u r by now. not sure, if u r so much into writing novels or not but yeah... someday, u can think 'bout it too... u know.. 'bout turning such "fleeting 4way fatal feelings" in chapters.. in a gr8 novel.

kinda like ur work!

[Alice Poésy]

Will do! I plan to post certain thoughts on here I want to "immortalise" :).

Thank you for your advice and kind words! I actually am working on a series of short stories off here based on these thoughts and certain events. I'm not so sure about them for now, but I think they could have potential.

I'm so happy we crossed paths, Rahul! Your words are very encouraging :).

[unspokenpain]

Is this the idea of time healing all wounds? That's what I interpreted from this. Bravo. Can't wait to read more of what you post.

[Alice Poésy]

See, this is what I like the most about poetry; the way people interpret it differently from one another. I read it from your perspective and indeed, I see where it is coming from!

I wrote this while I literally coming across fading receipts and I reminisced about the past, getting upset that sometimes I can't see his face as clearly in my head anymore. Maybe in a couple of years I'll read this again, and interpret it the way you do.

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts :). Loved your comment!

[unspokenpain]

Your welcome. Hope I read more ^.^

[sinNsincerity]

Don't even worry if you're doing "it right," I don't believe this is a right way to write poetry.
"hotel receipts are fading
along with the structure of your face," this was killer!

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much! It's always nice to know that my stumbling along is considered alright.

[sinNsincerity]

Always.......

[Pink Pastel]

You are doing it right. And gurllll!!!!l great thoughts^-^

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for reading

[Pink Pastel]

Of course anytime I like to return the kindness:)

[Alice Poésy]

I really appreciate it :D

[Mifa]

Hotel receipts huh...the aftermath of a tryst is what this feels like to me. Nice one though. Short and concise in the exact sweet length you very much like. Look forward to your next one though.

[Alice Poésy]

Hehe, you're a sharp one. Thank you very much, hoping to post more soon!

[Mifa]

Lol...thanks for the compliment. The scenario just felt an awful bit familiar.

[raven]

very intimate and lovely piece. it has a unique style representing you and i like it a lot. good work. don't worry, you're doing great! nobody here really know what it's doing either. (at least i don't, that is)

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much; that's incredibly nice! I never know what I'm doing so I guess I'll fit in quite well. Thanks for reading!

[raven]

you sure will! ^_^ you're very welcome.

[Gray]

You don't want to forget it happened as far as I can see in this. Human connections are what puts a little light in our hearts.

You're doing fine.

[Alice Poésy]

I have an intense fear of forgetting. I want to remember every single second and every single detail about everything, especially about certain people and memories. Which is quite strange. If you forget something, you don't know you did.

Thank you!

[Gray]

You want to soak up life like a sponge and retain it all. Nothing wrong with that. Just make sure you leave room for the really important stuff.

You're welcome.

[Alice Poésy]

Great words and advice, thanks! Hope you're having a good day.

[Gray]

So far, so good. :)

[isus]

very nice little poem, i like it :)

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you! Just small thoughts and feelings washing over, haha. Thank you for reading :)

[Lorry]

Yeah, you're doing it right. Beautifully captured in so few words, that feeling of a fear of forgetting, or maybe a fear of being forgot. I like, thanks for sharing.

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you so much for commenting and for your thoughts! It really means a lot when people read my stuff

[Lorry]

You're very welcome. Oh, and welcome :)

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you! You're absolutely lovely :)

[Lorry]

Thank you, but let's just wait and see how long that lasts :)