scribbled on hotel stationery dated 20/11/2015

Fleeting Thoughts #2

You counted the freckles on my back,

while I made a list of things 

that reminded me of you;

our throats choking on those 

three words we would not dare speak -

And for now,

that would do.

Author's Note

Something I wrote down some time ago, found while trying to search for some inspiration to finish this creative project I have to get done by the end of this week.

It's short, but thought I'd share. I still could identify.

Reviews

[Joshua Demarest]

This is a wonderful poem. Short and sweet. The imagery is so clear it's like I'm there as a fly on the wall for one moment suspended in eternity. The structure of this poem flowed perfectly - the punctuation worked well and the line break that implied exactly which three little words you were both choking on was stellar. Then the almost broken pause between "and for now" and "that would do" (at least for me) allowed for plenty of thought. Overall, this is really great stuff.

[Alice Poésy]

Your review was an absolute delight to read, filled both with praise and an in-depth analysis of the piece. I can't thank you enough for taking the time to read it.

I've come to realise that punctuation, pauses and breaks are the body language of written words. They can either make it, or break it, as they say. Really delighted it gave you something to think about. Thank you very much for stopping by; it was a pleasure.

[Paul Bell]

Like this, it conjures up a hidden secret. I love you. You go back to him, i go back to her.

[Alice Poésy]

Spot on! Thanks for stopping by.

[Ashwin Shanker]

our throats choking on those
three words we would not dare speak
Is it "I love you?"
It yes then ... What an absolutely superb way to present it. Whoa. I might borrow these wordings for a later context coz I seriously cant think of a better way to say it.
I like the ending, that would do... too... nice three letters once more... yet effective

[Alice Poésy]

Yes, it's 'I love you'. They felt so prohibited that to call them by their exact names here just wouldn't do. Thank you for finding that superb :D.

You've got an eye for detail is what I can say. Thank you for reading and stopping by. Loved your review!

[Gee]

Conjures a lovely image of two lovers,(post coital) without a care in the world, naked, comfortable with their lot. "I love you"....probably the most thought about three words before sharing in any new relationship, ( as a drunken womanizer I would use them to get my wicked way, WRONGGGGG) now I tell my wife (23 years) and daughter several times a day, every day.....contentment and true love.....A lovely write..sorry for waffling

[Alice Poésy]

Waffle all you want! The longer the review, the happier it makes me. Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts. It was a delight to read :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

This says so much, in so few words. It is amazing how our words scribbled on either coffee shop serviettes or hotel stationery can bring smiles to our faces :) I regularly discover poems I wrote ages ago.....then my first thought usually is, "Did I really write this? " Thanks for sharing.

[Alice Poésy]

Sometimes they're the best ones! So raw and honest.

I know that feeling well. Sometimes I feel so astonished and think: Huh, this a good line and I wrote it? Strange.

I love how we preserve certain memories with words. Thank YOU for reading and stopping by :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

You're welcome......the worst feeling for a poet is not having anything to write with when a flash of inspiration arrives......my "best" one so far was written on the back of a lunch invoice with a pen borrowed from a waiter...:)

[Alice Poésy]

Indeed! But they give us such tales, don't they? "I borrowed a pen from a waiter and wrote this on the back of my lunch invoice", I love that. Two things for the price of one.

[M.E.Lyle]

Those three words, so powerful in their meaning, having said them, wondering if maybe you shouldn't, or having not said them, wondering if maybe you should.
What do you do? There is no guarantee there will be a tomorrow, or another second for that matter...what do you do?
And for now, will that do?
I like your work.

[Alice Poésy]

You raise such important questions! Questions to be pondered on.

Thank you for reading and stopping by! Much appreciated. Will stop by yours very soon :)

[Brianna Brie]

Oh, I hate it when that happens! Love is meant to be shared. Complications...

[Alice Poésy]

Complications are a great divide. But yes, love is indeed meant to be shared. Sometimes where words fail us, actions have to suffice. After all, actions can mean more than words at times :)

Thank you for stopping by!

[Inject Positivity]

"three words we would not dare speak" you got unique way with presenting meaning in your works... This one is very thought provoking... thoughts roam in our mind in so many ways and by writing them with such graciousness is not easy my frnd... The title is itself speaks thought provoking message...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Alice Poésy]

You're flattering me so much with all your generous words on my writings! Thoughts are such strange creatures, and they seem to attach themselves to my heart that I just cannot deny them the pleasure of being penned out. If I could, I'd immortalise everything.

I cannot thank you enough for your kind words. I will be stopping by your space soon. With reviews like these, your writings cannot be anything less than beautiful :)

[wordman]

ahh! the three words that we ponder over for a long while before we blurt them out

[Alice Poésy]

Indeed we do! The hardest of words.

Thank you for stopping by :).

[Rahul]

short. but way sturdy. like d mix. of a little bit of tenderness that u have stirred with words. sometimes, it's circumstances that choke thoughts down & it's all worth doin' 'cause... i believe, if things get found easily, it's always further put on waste so it's worth speaking eye to eye rather buzzing words around. i really do like ur work, Miss Europe.

luking fwd 2 readin' ur work!

[Alice Poésy]

Thank you, Rahul! Circumstances are indeed wretched things at times. Wise words. Better to not leave certain things unsaid, but again: circumstances can choke our words.

Just read your poem and wonderful imagery! I look forward to more of your work as well! Thank you for stopping by.

[Chris]

This one brought a smile. "Afters" have a way of ...touching... us.

[Alice Poésy]

Indeed they do :).

Thank you for your lovely thoughts, Chris. Glad to bring a smile :)