Overwinter

next to the burning ocean 

there was

you,

like a golden umbra

intoxicating

mesmerizing

a mortal soul like me

salty sea breezes played with our tongues

as our minds wandered below cinnamon waves

grasping one last vestige as we held out hope

this resuscitation would be something more 

than lips to flesh

silk to felt

meet me in the hydrosphere

we will make our way there

sharing quintessence

having lasted for days and weeks and months

is this our epiphany

or do we need more

Reviews

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~~ i think we all need a little more every day... to increase our personal momentum... ~~ if we stop at one particular point in time, we stagnate and become static... ~~ this is an interesting piece, alisa... yet again, i find that it asks the right question in the closing lines...

[ANTO]

Aloha dear friend, I missed this one but I think I was meant to - it found me today and its a truly beautiful read. Its great to immerse oneself in it and savour it over and over.
Really beautiful...

[Alisa Js]

Aloha ANTO,

Why thank you, kind sir! I am touched and quite flattered by your comments.

Sending you smiles across the miles between us...

Alisa 💫

[D Ruppert]

the imagery here is brilliant, a nice blend of light an dark. posing many interesting questions, one's that I'm sure are asked constantly.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you David door your time and comments....I trust all is well.

Alisa 💫

[Perdition]

You are incurable..so I shall never try or there be found the fool. It is the same with better flow and words but what of chickens..lol.
It's beautiful and as I said you are beyond cure so I will praise the flow and I will praise the words but as for the content it is of the same and if that is your mark forever, then you are making it better and so well done.

[Alisa Js]

Thank you, I guess. Every time I write something that is different, darker,more intense...nothing happens....no one bothers to stop by to comment and I wonder why that is...whenever I post something taken from a page of life...like Passages...the response is lukewarm at best.

Not that it matters that much, although I am curious of other's thoughts and critiques.

I need to be truly inspired again...all this continuing endless melodrama is taking its toll, I am beginning to think...

For whatever that was worth...maybe 2cents and a bag of half-eaten chips....

😺

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is like "wow" love on another plane...

somewhere in between...but of course that is where most of the real life is.

nicely done, Alisa.

j.

[Alisa Js]

Aloha J,

Thank you for your time and comments.. I will be by soon.

Alisa ;-)