Day and Night

Two people live in two different time zones. When one is waking up, the other is going to bed. It’s a bit like they work different “shifts” in the “factory of dreams.”

Dew and fog of early dawn

Fade and lazily dissipate

The playhouse of your dreams is closing

 

Pleasant visions, illusions

Slowly vanish, evaporate

Leaving you empty, yearning for more

 

The dreams you dropped I’ll pick up

Embellish and elaborate

With moonflowers for a pure white wreath

 

Day and night, like you and I,

Their own part they each dedicate

From two half souls one whole we create

Author's Note

Syllables per line in each stanza: 7-8-9
This is intended to reflect the ticking of a clock, the passing of time, and the unwavering precision with which day and night alternate.

Rhyme scheme: aba cbd ebf gbb
The rhyming words in the middle of each stanza (“dissipate, evaporate, elaborate, dedicate”) create an “eternal division” between the two alternating lines, mirroring the way day and night are forever separated, and yet they create a unified whole. This pattern is only broken in the last stanza, suggesting a way out of the “prison of Time."

Reviews

[Lorry]

Funny how effortlessly we can find ourselves acclimatising to another time zone, wondering how their day went as ours ends or begins, becoming instant experts in dual zone timing, where you look at watch and automatically add or deduct to get to their time and have virtual dinner dates with one always eating breakfast as the other has a meal.
One of the perks of modern technology is that people can be brought together instantly that would make previous generations head explode at its simplicity.
Really like the positives in this, which could so easily have turned ugly at the distance being a barrier, which is another aspect of technology that is brought up far too often.
Look for the positives and you will find them, look at the negative and it will beall you se.
Anyway, enough negativity around without adding to it, so top marks for seeing the good and passing it on.

[Laz K.]

You're right about keeping it positive. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[John the Baptist]

There are things to be said for long distance relationships. Sometimes absence does indeed make the heart grow fonder. It's living together, one on one that can be challenging. But when it works, it's worth it.

[Laz K.]

Very true. Thank you for reading and commenting.

[Lola Voyage]

i really like the concept of two lovers that can never meet, separated and United by TIME. it is short but extremely pleasant, and conveys everything you needed to say, thank you so much for this. i am new here and you are the first person i read, i find it fascinating that it is also about dreams because i am fascinated by dreams.... now i am about to read all your poems!! :)

[Laz K.]

Thank you! I'm honored to be your first here. You'll doubtless find many others who are more talented than myself. Welcome to the cafe.

[Lola Voyage]

thank you. i could have not imagines a better introduction into this cozy, lovely space. i am eager to read from more people, and also more from your work.:)

[Vertigo Cat1111]

I loved the wording here, and 'the playhouse of dreams?' Absolutely genius! I love this idea. I agree with the others, a true masterpiece with such a creative mind and greatly flowing words.

[Laz K.]

Thank you! I'm humbled by your very kind words.

[Amber Stone]

masterpiece: no more, no less. sincerely, Amber.

[Dave Brown]

that is all well beyond me but it reminds me of how much dreaming I do and how much I enjoy most of my little adventures

[Laz K.]

Haha, yes, I went all out academic with this one. Not sure it helped after all, but it was a sort of experiment. Thank you for reading and commenting.