Creepy!

Creepy!

A Poem by andrew mitchell

The blanket of fog creaked
Going up the stairs,
The perverse shadow
On wall climbing.

Until, leaning over the bed
An image; a pallid woman
In long tattered dress, white.
Her face devoid of eyes and flesh
With mouth distorted, shrieking
Words in murmurs, evil.

Dried thin skin emaciated
On yellow ashen bones
while drawn tightly long
Wispy flowing black hair.

From her lacy sleeves
Hands like claws, 
Bones yellow lined
While talons cold reach out
Stretching the body withered
Scratching down my cheek deep.

With mutilated claws stretched
Moving, touching my flesh, my body
Shaken, the throat constricting
Shortness of breath.

I hear her words repeating
Her face bloodless, contorting
Looking paler and paler
Repeating words repeating with malice.


"Honey! Get Up!"
"You'll be late for work!"
"You'll be late for work"
"Get up!"
"Honey!"

© 2015 andrew mitchell


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You always grasp my attention with your writes and I am never disappointed my friend! Great twist... I know that feeling of waking up late and being in he deepest of deep sleeps! Great write loved the humor also :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

Thank you my friend
As always Andrew you know how to pack a powerful punch of humour. Loved the flow and description and the ending is just smile a mile! There is however repetition of words that steal the thunder from the write. You describe her face twice as 'ashen' and you use 'claws' three times in such a short piece. For the latter you could use talons and boney fingers etc?

Posted 8 Years Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

Thanks John for the heads up . I see what you mean!!
Great creepy description and a great twist to finish.

Posted 8 Years Ago


more of this please AM. I enjoyed this and laughed at my own gullibility at the end - class !!

Posted 8 Years Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

Thank you Anto, you gullible???? Never! You are too kind:)
Lol, I had no clue it would end like THAT! What a clever, clever man you are!

Posted 8 Years Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

Thank you Kelly lol:)
Omg this had me hooked form start to finish. Such a brilliant write, the imagery is fantastic, such details i could see it all very clearly!
Then end ,,,awesome!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

Thank you sereena lol Glad you enjoyed!

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Added on June 5, 2015
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andrew mitchell
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