Wonder Lust

Wonder Lust

A Poem by sinNsincerity

You left me breathless

when you asked,

“Do you like my

necklace?,” as

you escalated your

fingers down from

your left collar

bone towards your cleavage.

The center piece...

Heart exceeding because

a dose of you is

extremely needed!

Please my dear, I’m

in dire need

of O D-ing!

© 2018 sinNsincerity


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Lovely write! Can sense the passion between the lines...

However, I'm not sure whether "escalate" is the right word for what the fingers did......yes, maybe the situation escalated.......and that is quite a pivotal verb in the poem.....so I cannot suggest an alternative, but that's what I got in my first reading.....

Towards the end of the poem, it got a "rap" vibe, where my feet started to tap, but then it stopped.....as if there was more to come....

Great work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Years Ago

Escalate as in an escalator. They go up as well as down. Hence her fingers moving downward.
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Lovely write! Can sense the passion between the lines...

However, I'm not sure whether "escalate" is the right word for what the fingers did......yes, maybe the situation escalated.......and that is quite a pivotal verb in the poem.....so I cannot suggest an alternative, but that's what I got in my first reading.....

Towards the end of the poem, it got a "rap" vibe, where my feet started to tap, but then it stopped.....as if there was more to come....

Great work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

6 Years Ago

Escalate as in an escalator. They go up as well as down. Hence her fingers moving downward.
T.. read more
Very well paced. I enjoyed reading this

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

annalysiar

7 Years Ago

Oh thank you thst will help me tremendously
sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

It would be my pleasure!
annalysiar

7 Years Ago

😀😀😀why thank you kind sir😊
Well, that escalated. Lol a little bit anyway. Interesting piece, Sincerity. Provides pretty good imagery and allows the reader to feel the racing of the persona's heart as the description proceeds. Great work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Thank you for thinking so Tessa!
Your poems kind of remind me of Nikki Giovanni's book of love poems titled "bicycles," because they express so much emotion in just a few sentences, which I love. Its one of the reasons why Giovanni is one of my favorite poets.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

I just looked looked her up and thank you for introducing me to her. I will most definitely look int.. read more
I liked the energy and the drive of these words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote!
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Great piece! The ending has left me wanting to read more. Intriguing indeed.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Thank you Nina, I'm glad that you did .
It's really good man. The words fit almost perfectly. Too short though, you can extend the goodness. Re find and recycle a little of that imagination you happened to be using that day. If you can.

I wouldn't stop working on this one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

I intentionally left it short. I would have to take you to bed to shoe you the rest.
sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

.....*Show
Davidgeo

7 Years Ago

I trust you made the right choice.
I agree with M.L.Francello.. a great piece indeed!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Tara, I'm glad that you'd enjoyed it.
This poem has a comical side and a beautiful sense throughout the whole this. Showing the love between two people. A very good poem :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

if i would have continued, it would have gotten x rated
Lauren_The_Awesome

7 Years Ago

Omg lol well it is still beautiful :)
Sensuous. Your artistic delivery words. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I try my best to close my eyes and upon up the memory as vivid as the experience .. read more
Fahmida Mehreen

7 Years Ago

Totally worth appreciating.

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