Why?

I know this poem is crap. No rhythm, no anything. But it has my feelings. And I'm extremely broken right now, so please don't judge me.

Why can't I f*****g be,
Good enough for someone?
Why can't I stop being,
Shot in the heart with a gun?

I'm not good enough,
So why did you pretend?
Why did you ever pretend to,
Care more than just a friend?

Why did you use me?
Why did you hurt me?
Why'd you break my heart?
Couldn't you just let me be?

My f*****g heart is trashed,
What I thought was love is gone,
But you don't care the slightest,
To you, it was only ever a con.

All the "I love you"s..
You should've just said,
"I hate your guts,
I want you dead",
That would've been better.

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

I am sorry you continue to feel this intense pain! May you heal and find a bit of happiness again! I see you want to close your account. Please don't! It is okay to write of what is bothering one. It is good therapy, and does not always have to mean anything to another. Writing is coping, venting, lots of things for different poets.
Please don't be so very hard on yourself!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, Miss Sheila. I'm working on it :/

[Khloevhr]

Very much relatable. This sends a STRONG message... I tend to blabber in my reviews about how it relates to my life, but I will not be selfish... We are here for you... Your pain has been expressed. This is very deep and emotional, true of how you feel. You can talk to me too. If you'd like.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[Lucien Maier]

hummm, now don't take offence. But these are a dime a dozen. Your emotion shows through but does not lend anything new or lesson giving to the piece.
I was hooked by "Why can't I f*****g be, Good enough for someone?"
but was really hoping the next line would be the counter argument to why you would indeed be great for someone.
You really released a lot of emotion here and that is very well done, but I know you can do better.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks. But I don't HAVE a counter argument, I DON'T believe that I'm good enough, that's the point.

[Lucien Maier]

but that's not the truth. Of course there are people out there that are compatible with you. This one guy does not hold the opinion of the entire world in his palm. From you Technic I can tell you have amazing talent. so wait a sec watch this::::

[Geon Quuin]

Lay off, Lucien. The last thing in her mind right now is how she could make this poem better. She's trying to lighten up her wounded heart. Don't ever think like that. You are more than good enough. It's not entirely your fault. Although I have yet to see you in person, I think you'd look more beautiful if you smile. Cry your eyes out tonight, and let it go by tomorrow. I know it's not easy, but you have to. Stop thinking about your past. I'll be here to support you from here on out.

[Lucien Maier]

sorry if I caused offence I will leave.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I don't think Lucien meant any harm. It is true that there is someone out there for everyone, even if it doesn't seem so at the time.

[C.C. Marx]

Lay it all out there, throw out all caution and tell us how you really feel. This is definitely one of the most emotional and relatable pieces ive seen be you...why? because you really didn't hold back. Great job

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, C. I'm kinda really vulnerable, I didn't know what else to do but lay it all out there.. I figured it can't get any worse.

[C.C. Marx]

My pleasure as always. It can only get better from here, something a little vulnerability is good, it gives us a sense as readers on who you really are and feel. Sometimes laying your heart on the line gives the best results

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you.

[Geon Quuin]

I could relate to this. I'm currently going through something similar. You might be able to relate to my poem, If you're gonna walk away. If you ever need someone to talk to, to listen to you, or to cry on, don't hesitate to give me a call.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you, Geon. That's sweet of you.

[Amanda]

I agree with the last line. Nice job tho not a nice..subject

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

:/ Thanks Amanda.

[Be myself!]

I almost cried. Amanda, everything will be fine. I promise you. message me hun so I can help you.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you. And I'll message you later, I promise. I'm gonna try to get my mind off things and stop crying first though, and I have to babysit, so I'll message you when I get home from that.

[Be myself!]

Alright. Good luck hun.

[Akira Kodama]

This made me teary eyed. Especially when I saw the picture. I'm so sorry for what's going on. You will heal over time. Again, I'm sorry. Great write, obviously from the heart.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you.