Everytime I think of you

Acrostic

 

  

Remorse envelops my entire being

Every time I think of you

Pictures from the past emerge

Each of your wounds has a sad story to tell

No amount of repentance can undo my loss

The promises that you believed in

Are the ones I’ve broken ruthlessly

Not once did you blame me for your pain

Conscience hurts for your silent tears

Every time I think of you

 

Author's Note

Reminds of one of my favorite songs.
"She's always a woman to me"

Reviews

[Carole]

This is a gripping piece, but I agree with Valentine...the picture does not do it the justice that another might...Could you try a picture representing sadness? It might be more fitting.

Acrostics are not easy to do, so I applaud you for hammering this out..

So much mixed emotion in this one. There seems to be remorse for this dear ones woundedness, and at the same time an utter disdain towards this person for the loss incurred...an almost murderous revenge towards them. At least, that is what the picture portrays. Sends a strong message. Your choice in font color...BLOOD red! Perfect for what I believe you are trying to portray in this piece.

Appreciate the raw emotion and candidness here...

Well done! Carole

[frogbean]

the sence of power and regret was strong. it seemd as if you were regretfull for him not blaming you for somthing he probably should have.
i liked the poem just it had an odd vibe to it

FrOgBeAn

How painful,i enjoyed reading it.

[Lau Thiam Kok]

I enjoyed reading and reading these two combination of words in this poem,
"Remorse envelops"
"Conscience hurts"

and these two lines,
"No amount of repentance can undo my loss"
"Every time I think of you"

they are so 'alive'. thank you.

[Jane Doe]

I love what you did with this piece. It is a wonderful write.

'Pictures from the past emerge

Each of your wounds has a sad story to tell'

I really liked those lines, although the entire piece is great.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is again very painful and powerful indeed!

"Not once did you blame me for your pain
Conscience hurts for your silent tears" - These are really the best lines (according to me) in the entire write.

Wouldn't it be much better if it would be like-
"Every time I think of you
Remorse envelops my entire being....." :)
I mean, starting and ending the write with the same line "Every time I think of you.."

Great work! :)

[larryb]

I like and yes i do believe you could turn this into a song, i have written many that can be converted...