She

She was born to the Day,
but given over to the Night.
Her brain fizzled like seltzer.
Anxiety was a monster that she let in.
She was born with a star and a moon.
She opened her eyes like curtains,
drawing in the warmth of the Sun.
Her eye lashes were like butterflies fluttering in the wind.
They were long and beautiful.
Her soul felt evanescent,
the way it ebbed and flowed like the Tide.
She glowed like a star at Night,
like something ethereal,
like something from another world.

Reviews

[duff]

A rainbow of emotions trying to navigate the day. She stands tall no matter what. Gorgeous writing.

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much, Duff.

[Fran Marie]

A well written piece, visual and
vivid imagery within the lines
born of the day, given to the night
the otherworldly attributes given her
with ethereal essence & evanescent
soul....a lovely write ..I enjoyed

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

I adored the poetry my dear friend.
"Her eye lashes were like butterflies fluttering in the wind.
They were long and beautiful.
Her soul felt evanescent,
the way it ebbed and flowed like the Tide."
The above lines. So good and meaningful. You made the words dance. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[W. Barrett Munn]

Nicely written LA. In my mind it is set up perfectly for some kind of disjuntive ending. For an example of one of the great disjunctive endings of all time check out this poem by William Duffy. You can find it on the internet: "Lying in a Hammock at William Duffy's Farm in Pine Island, Minnesota".

Winston
P.S. Line 8 should be "were" instead of "where".

[light and ashes]

I will check that out, thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful description here Light. Anxiety is indeed a monster. It can turn a calm sea into a raging torrent. Fabulous write.

Chris

[light and ashes]

Thank you, lady.

[Neville]

some things just have to be seen to be believed and even then, they are unbelievable .. beauty of course tho in the eye of the beholder, is a fine example .. N

[light and ashes]

Thank you for your review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

metaphorically exceptional...
why is it that everything beautiful must now seem like it is from another world.
especially love the line "she opened her eyes like curtains"---

j.

[light and ashes]

Pleased you liked this piece, Jacob.. Thank you for stopping by.