My Son's Keeper

My son how I love him.

                                                Little Tate and I

I am my life's sole keeper

in the garden of my dreams

Within it dwell the great hopes

along with all my schemes

 

Why for me only the hard way

has taught my mind since youth

Does it seem could be no other

than a fact and cold hard truth

 

I chose the road that I tread

from my bold disdaining action

I would never listen to another

except to my own satisfaction

 

Lucky that he knows me not

for my sadness hides regret

As they who think to know me

know less the nearer they get

 

My son how I do love him

touching most his dreams within

But all I want for his heart

is to not go where I've been

Author's Note

How often we look back on the road that wound through our lives? Only to find it would have been much better if we had taken the easy way. But perhaps some of us are destined to blaze trails yet unknown. It was so with me. And yet I can't but think how much I wish something different for my own son. None of us wish our children to hurt others .Nor do we want to see them in pain.

Reviews

[The Old Ashes]

O.K.
so I try not to completely shower the writer with praise
when I write a review
but oh my god..
I'm such a crybaby lol I'm welling up.
That picture for starters
just looking at it
while reading this
but the way you ended it..
oh my goodness.
I'm a sucker for this kind of stuff. My favorite song is With Arms Wide Open by Creed...
the power of a parents love for a child.
Wowzers.
in short
I loved it
:) You're an amazing writer
They say that in order to write well,
you must write about what you know.
What you're familiar with.
This is a spectacular piece coming from an emotion you know well.
Pity this thing won't let me rate over 100.
You'd have a 110/100

[Phibby Venable]

beautiful and strong

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

What a beautiful, heart warming poem. I love this! Very well done indeed :)

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Tate,

How many of us have regrets? Guess we're not perfect, huh! And how we
hope our offspring will avoid our mistakes. But aren't these the same wishes
of our parents? Of course they are. So what do we conclude? It's that life's
lessons are hard learned. When we're young we usually can't be told what the
world is like. We have to find this out ourselves. So provide what guidance
you can, but be prepared for a rocky road.

Beautiful sentiments, as always.

Best regards,

Rick

[The Analog Kid]

We love our children and want better for them, right? Nice expression of those sentiments.

[DBURKE]

This is a great poem. I really love the last stanza as a parents dreams for their children are always for them not to make the same mistakes or to turn out better than we were. I really enjoyed this poem!

[Stammers]

'Lucky that he knows me not'

He'll know you soon enough, and he'll love the bits you cannot, as you will with him.

It's well written, I can relate to the feelings in the last line, sad but well expressed.

[Therene]

*eyes pop out* It reminded me of one conversation I had with a friend. I asked him, "If one day your children visits you from the future, what would you tell them?" His answer was quite simple. "I was not always a father." :))

Well, I still couldn't relate to it...but if someday I'd be blessed with a son, or a child for all it matters, I would also wish all the best for him and for him to radiate goodness to others. :) The poem conveys the message effectively. To be a parent, to give love, not to deprive, and not to corrupt the mind of the young; all encapsulated in magnificent poem. For technicals, I have not much to say. Your flow is good, grammar is effective, and rhyme is good.

Over all, great write! :D

[Havatara]

I loved it, and I thought that it was kind of cool how you didn't use any punctuation. You don't see many poems that can pull that off. Very well done.

[Manda]

wow this was really good. I love how you talked about you and then told us that you didnt want your sons life to be like yours. very well done!

[alyssa]

This peom, many can relate to... its words have a perfect flow and evry word decribing great emotion.This is a well written and soo true peom.
Thank you for sharing this lovely peom,
alyssa x3