Foolish Pride

 

 

What frail creatures we men are

made from sinew, muscle and pride

Thinking we can conquer the world

for the woman who sits by our side

 

All is brash, gall and bravado

with such a carefree debonair

Taunting those who test our mettle

intimidating all who dare

 

A young man thinks himself gifted

to hold sway and folly so near

Injure his pride and you will find

that he becomes someone to fear

 

A man is nothing without pride

it is the food that feeds his soul

Desired respect of fellows

becomes his sole life’s aim and goal

 

The handsome woman of his dreams

is she that realizes this flaw

Playing to his strength and weakness

by pretending she never saw

 

To that woman he grants comfort

strong arms forever hold her tight

Their truth of heart is not broken

whenever she is out of sight

 

The reason men are unfaithful

they behave only by your side

Has little to do with temper

and everything to do with pride

 

If you wish for a happy home

a man who's strait forward and true

Then play host to his foolish pride

and he will be loyal to you

 

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Author's Note

It is almost comical to me just how naive we men are about our own weakness. So I wrote this for the women to understand what it is that drives men. For the men this is no surprise it is what men are taught from cradle to the grave.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Most enjoyable. Simple but great wisdom. I confess I am full of P. I agree it can be a flaw, but it is also perhaps what makes us exciting, what drives us on. Cruel Life demands that we win, win, win. Maybe pride is a sort of oil in our cogs. What are we without it? As ever balance is all though. Too little and we are inert, too much and we are insufferable.

[StoryTailor]

Hmm, too true. I like the poem over all, but the last line seems a tad off to me. Heh, but maybe that's just me. I wouldn't really know, I'm not much of a poet. REgardless, I enjoyed reading it. It had a nice rhythm and all that. So... It's a great piece, flows well... And it's true. I liked it.

[CircusNerd]

wow this flow was brilliant, and the diction was really well-played.

[Jenny Nelson]

Excellent! Honest! Perceptive! Well chosen words that fit together quite well. Liked this much.

[Sexy P3nguin]

Injure his pride and you will find,

that he becomes someone to fear.

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The reason men are unfaithful,

why they only behave by her side.

Has little to do with temper,

and everything to do with pride.

Those are my two favorite parts in this poem. Knowing my grandfather was in WW2 I can really see that without pride our army is nothing and thats what your poem made me realize. Great read great job lust great

[Helena]

"If you wish for a happy home,
a man who's strait forward and true.
Then play host to his foolish pride,
and he will stay true to you."

Hmmm, is that what I did wrong? Oh well, whatever!
I so enjoyed this my friend. It was a joy to read
such a well written poem....you never disappoint.

I loved all the stanzas, especially
this one:

"To that woman he grants comfort,
strong arms forever hold her tight.
Their truth of heart is not broken,
whenever she is out of sight."

Just lovely writing Tate.

~Helena~

[Delightful Writer]

I enjoyed reading this poem. It has a good flow to it :) Thanks for sharing!

[TraceyPotgieter]

I really enjoyed this poem! Sadly it is so true that all too often good men are destroyed because of their pride. I found this to be a pleasant and easy read except for some punctuation placements as was mentioned before. Some interesting food for thought.

[An owl on the moon]

What powerfully spoken words, delving deep into your psyche... what we long for and seek after. Vivid and gripping, you words give us such thoughts to ponder about life and love in our fraility...

[Thomas B. Buckman]

I like this poem very much.
The flow is just right, and the idea is simple, and to the point all the way through the piece.

[Allegra Pescatore]

good poem. the meter and rhyme really work and in mot places the flow is good. It might need some very minor revision, a little punctuation and maybe a few less words in a few of the longer lines, but all in all good job.

Very good depiction of the subject matter as well, and great picture to accompany it.