Foolish Pride

 

 

What frail creatures we men are

made from sinew, muscle and pride

Thinking we can conquer the world

for the woman who sits by our side

 

All is brash, gall and bravado

with such a carefree debonair

Taunting those who test our mettle

intimidating all who dare

 

A young man thinks himself gifted

to hold sway and folly so near

Injure his pride and you will find

that he becomes someone to fear

 

A man is nothing without pride

it is the food that feeds his soul

Desired respect of fellows

becomes his sole life’s aim and goal

 

The handsome woman of his dreams

is she that realizes this flaw

Playing to his strength and weakness

by pretending she never saw

 

To that woman he grants comfort

strong arms forever hold her tight

Their truth of heart is not broken

whenever she is out of sight

 

The reason men are unfaithful

they behave only by your side

Has little to do with temper

and everything to do with pride

 

If you wish for a happy home

a man who's strait forward and true

Then play host to his foolish pride

and he will be loyal to you

 

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Author's Note

It is almost comical to me just how naive we men are about our own weakness. So I wrote this for the women to understand what it is that drives men. For the men this is no surprise it is what men are taught from cradle to the grave.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Most enjoyable. Simple but great wisdom. I confess I am full of P. I agree it can be a flaw, but it is also perhaps what makes us exciting, what drives us on. Cruel Life demands that we win, win, win. Maybe pride is a sort of oil in our cogs. What are we without it? As ever balance is all though. Too little and we are inert, too much and we are insufferable.

[Jane Doe]

I LOVVEEE IT BEAUTIFUL I AM NOT AS GOOD AS YOU AT ALL
EVERYONE U TO TATE PLZ I WANNA KNOW GIVE ME FEED BACK ON THIS I LOVE IT
i like the part on a guys arms around the girl like the fairy tales whatm most of us want to be held by someone of ur's if u have that whats it like reallly

[Lexi Nicole]

Very nicely written, and with such an air of truth to it! Pride truly is a huge fault of both man and all of the human race. I like your honesty in this, and the flow and structure of the piece are great. Nice job!

-Howl

[NM Sarah]

Ha! You could be a marriage counselor, Tate. Quite perceptive and humble. But this is the best verse:

A young man thinks himself gifted,
to hold sway and folly so near.
Injure his pride and you will find,
that he becomes someone to fear.

And it is terrifying. In the ghetto you could be murdered for a slight, but in the boardroom you could be humiliated, marginalized or even canned. Boys on the schoolyard practice so that by adulthood the system is perfected.

Great topic to tackle.

Much appreciated.

Sarah

[Aditya Unni]

now this guy is a true poet.

[Kelley Quinn]

I like the rhyme of it all. It was discreet but made the flow miraculous. and the reason behind it all was intriguing. The purpose was clear, but you had to think about it a bit before it all connected.

[Star Wolf]

Very nice. A man needs his pride as long as it doesn't get in the way of what's important. A woman needs her pride too.

[LadyNaida]

Wow, this is deep.

[cartera]

Not too sure about the advice-giving last verse, but otherwise a very well written poem filled with wisdom.

[rosanna1120]

this is very good. I am not quiet sure how to comment, the rhyme is so simpal an yet so perfect and brilliant. You are very talented. I like how you wrote about a trait instead of a story. I do not know what else to say, in all honesty I can not find a flaw to cirtique. Your poem was beautifully written. Rosanna

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

I always believe in the philosophy of ANDREE LENOGE "GIVE ME WHAT I WANT AND I'LL BE ON MY WAY" BORN IN LUST TURN TO DUST,BORN IN SIN COME ON IN".
You are right about one thing though sir i think if woman massages man's pride and ego then he will stay loyal to her until he becomes bored and seeks to scratch another mark on his bedpost.