Day is Night

A nightmare about being alone

What I am none seems to know

my friends leave me by the many

I am the consumption of my dreams

till I find I haven't realized any

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Into the nothing of the noise

surrounding us all the where

A life of waking dreams abides

a living breathing nightmare

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My days are raging shipwrecks

on the tumultuous waves of life

Scattered as to the four winds

upon the rocks that are my strife

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I long for the days of childhood

when friends were like my brothers

Strength of virtue crowned my head

loved and untouched by any others

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Certain purpose was my goal

no question on the morrow

I woke to conscience that was clear

courage and faith I didn't borrow

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Now the dawn speaks of the dark

closing in upon my soul

With every day I linger on

my life rages out of control

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful picture! Like your poem it has a dark, brooding atmosphere, the gradual extinguishing of the human spirit. I so want to light a candle and have it flicker your thoughts into something lighter.

Grand meter and use of words, sad, sad, sad thoughts and wishes.

[Nothing Personal]

Oh such a great write. A Marvelous piece on despair and darkness. The imagery is beautiful and the theme is thoroughly fulfilled from your lines. Apt. Poems are meant for thoughts like this to come out in the open. And cross that dreamy boundary and enter reality. Well DONE !!

[Alexa Tasch]

wonderful and so full of emotion.

[Liza]

when our faith is tested...
patience is a virtue
its easy to love others & ourselves when things are bright & light...
the darkness is just a reminder of the pendulum swinging
either extreme begs for balance
we learn to appreciate one because we know of the other.

[Cherrie Palmer]

dark and dismal, sad and lonely laced in a smooth and graceful poem.

[Aven]

every time I look at this I see something different and something new, loved it!

[Alicante lullaby]

lovely Tate...eve your depression is inspiring...nicework.

[Alex W]

Really good poem, fits the meaning well. Picture is pretty cool too!

We all have bad times, all we can do is get through them till the good times come back again :-)

[Kandy]

Incredible. Your words are so powerful and full of emotion. They reflect with great clarity how life is when it's hard. It had unity throughout. Great rhyme. The tone clearly set. Absolute perfection.

[Marie Harrison]

I like this poem too it's very nice!