I love her

A love poem.

When i look above,
i see sky holding the stars.
For all,
moon seems miles away,
much distant and far.
But my moon is standing,
beside me
Natural, beautiful, my fantasy.

O ye O ye
she is my pretty queen
my heartbreaker, heartmaker
everything she is.
Fighter, lover, medicine, my healer
sparkler, sweeter, thriller and I feel

I love her,
she is in my beautiful memories.
Stuck in my heart,
written in the stars
her name with me.

Author's Note

Thanks for read and review.

Reviews

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I have some suggestions for you to improve on your grammar in this piece, but it's up to you to pay heed or not. I only wish to help :).

First stanza, line one and line two:
When I "look" above,
"I see" sky holding the stars

First stanza, line seven:
Beside me (omit "of")

Stanza two, line four:
Everything "she is"

Stanza two, line five and six:
"My" fighter, lover, medicine, "healer,"
sparkler, sweeter, thriller"," and I feel

Otherwise, no other suggestions I can come up with. It is a very sweet ode to one's love. A lovely serenade to sing (it sounds like one anyways!).

[armin]

Thankyou Nadia ,I'll definitely consider your suggestions.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem for love.
"I love her,
she is in my beautiful memories.
Stuck in my heart,
written in the stars
her name with me. "
I like the above lines. They are perfect. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[armin]

Thanks John, thank you so so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Confuser]

Such a heartfelt beautiful poem of love. The honest words flow so wonderfully, it would be loved by everyone. From the beginning, I was drawn to continue with the poem at: When I see above sky holding the stars. For all moon seems miles away, so distant and far but my moon is standing beside of me (WOW!!!) Natural, beautiful, my fantasy. It is so beautiful Armin. I simply like the way you right. Being a mother, or the person I am, love poetry that is filled with too much stuff (all I'll say, I cannot read); this is how a love poem should be written; well the kind I like anyway. You continue on and I love the other stanzas too. Great writing. Bravo.

[armin]

Thank you so much but one thing you and noone knows that I write my love poems thinking of only and only taylor swift, I really love her. Gonna propose her when I'll be a successful singer.

[Confuser]

She is a GREAT song writer. Glad to hear, was thinking to young to be in love..too much to accomplish first; trivia, Peter G. wrote the song, In Your Eyes, for then girlfriend/actress Rozanna Arquette. Known more in France; great actress.

[armin]

A Short story
My father is like my friend, he is a great companion in my grief and happiness. Once I was watching taylor song Love story, I asked my father ' Is she an angel'.
My father replied- ' son, don't look at her she is like a moon and we are on earth. She is too far away. Don't see the dreams which can never be fulfilled.
I told my father ,heights doesn't matter to me. I know she is like a big star far away from me. She is a queen of million hearts but I like her anyways. If she is a moon then I will be neil armstrong and her heart will be my space. I have faith in myself ,I'll meet her tell her How much I like her and if she accept my love ,gonna marry her.
Listening to that my father hugged me and blessed me with his hands.
Whenever I recall that day my eyes get numb. Dale, you know ,in my college's new year party I didn't participate in couple dance competition, because I don't like to dance with any other girl that place is reserved for taylor.
Sometimes I think will I be able to do it, will I be able to reach there? I have told everywhere in college, my neighbour, my relatives that taylor will my girl. But I am feeling pressure now, of my big dreams.
My band is also not working properly, drummer he passed through a huge accident last week riding his bike. He left the band.
Now everything is messed up. I am feeling little worried what will happen in future. I have a big pressure of my fancy dreams. But you know I hope everything will be alright one day.
Taylor she is an American and I am an indian. Don't know what is written in my destiny. But one thing I know I like really like her, I celebrate her birthday with her photograph. I have collected many gifts for her, give them all when I'll meet her.
I was feeling little stressed so I shared with you. Thanks Dale for listening me you are a great friend.

[Confuser]

First, everything will be fine. It is clique to say everything happens for a reason, but it does, I believe, even though it does hurt we learn. So sorry about your drummer; You answered your own questions; everything will be FINE. That doesn't mean you will not make mistakes and learn from them. Don't worry so much, you are too young. What's wrong with dreamin big? John Lennon, one song said "Life is what Happens, when you are making plans." Think that's wise. I am disturbed that you didn't dance; now if a contest would have taken a lot of time, I understand but not to be friends with other girls, that does not make sense to me, anyway. To me you are young and Taylor is a HUGE crush; you probably see many commanalities between you two. She went to Nashville at 14; you began at 14 with enormous goals. You don't know her; it is just a fantasy; I do think you will meet her one day...it may not work out like you think; who knows, but balance in life is so important. To focus only on one girl for your life, you will miss out on too many things. Don't worry about what you have said to people. Dreaming big is fine. You are from all I see a wonderful young man and all I can do is encourage you to keep writing, singing, college...so much find a balance. I've seen a lot about Taylor Swift; she is very, very busy. Working all the time; and her talent shows. Think about the possibility of you meeting her, she falls immediately in love with you - and then, there's no time for you (she's working)! And your goals are to continue with your band. Celebrate everyday as a birthday, Taylor Swift, is amazing but so are you. Live life now! So thankful you have a wonderful father; it is a great blessing indeed - I hope I helped and never thought about you as an indian and she white skinned. You are just passionate, full of emotions and fine, but find balance in life. Please don't become obsessed so much you miss out! Thank you for sharing with me. Things will work out!

[Confuser]

I just wrote a huge response, if you don't get it, please email me. Wow. I posted it.????

[armin]

I have sent you a mail . Thanks.

[Confuser]

Got it and thank you for your kind words.

[R Smith]

lovely romantic poem for your lover, great writing Armin :)

[armin]

Thanks, Richard for your kind words.

[ANTO]

This is lovely Armin - really lovely - a pleasure to read - thank you for the RR :)

[armin]

Anto, thanks man for your kind words.

[The Black Warrior]

O ye O ye
she is my pretty queen
my heart breaker, heart maker
everything is she.

^ My favorite part

This is beautiful Armin! "D

[armin]

You are kind suk, thanks for your visit.

[The Black Warrior]

You're welcome and it is my pleasure :D

[wordman]

a beautiful poem of love,great job

[armin]

Thanks ron, I appreciate that.

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

Tank you Armin it's Wonder full.

[armin]

Thanks you Dakir, but check spellings man, I am armin not armure.

[Ana B.]

This is a very romantic piece. My heartbreaker, heartmaker - my favorite line :)

[armin]

Thanks Ana B.

[stars are far]

aww that was very sweet work, and the way you expressed your love for her, is just so beautiful and innocent, may you always be togther .
keep that coming

[armin]

we are not together, try remember I told her name to you in my first review I posted at your page.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like "my moon is standing beside me"
but i especially like the image of the "sky holding the moon"

very romantic expression here.

[armin]

Thanks Jacob.