Haiku 2

A Poem by Amila Jay

I’ll send you a kiss of ashes

Taken from the words that burnt

Writing over you

© 2012 Amila Jay

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Leslie Philibert

I enjoyed this a lot, the contradiction between kiss and ashes and the use of the verb burnt with the gerund writing.It might be worth considering putting taken and writing in the lower case, the upper case implies a new phrase which slows down the tempo a bit, but it`s up to you ! Good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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?	very nicely done... Posted 12 Years Ago very nicely done... Rating /100 1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robbie~xoxo~

I feel the burn!... a very nice poem, indeed...
This can be a great Senryu, if the first line has 5 syllables. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sleeping Maiden

Beautiful! I love the metaphors here. I liked the picture i got from reading this.
Lovely work my dear! Keep writing. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Leslie Philibert

Posted 12 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

SUGATA M

I always love this kind of piece, spoken less but to be felt more with your feelings.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on May 16, 2012
Last Updated on May 16, 2012
Tags: life, pain, love, despair, human

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Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka

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Hello everyone, My name is Amila and I'm 22. I love listening to music, taking down lyrics, doing research, writing, playing video games, watching movies, etc... - Myspace Layouts,Graphics, and C.. more..