Look At Me Now

Challenge Answer - Embrace The Joy (not my best by any stretch to the imagination, but hey I tried)

Look at this wino,

Sober at last,

Smiling and laughing

And sharing such wonder.

Look at this boozer

With light in her eyes,

Sitting round’ tables

With folks who don’t mix.

Look at this inebriate,

Humble and content,

Hand holding hand,

Joining in prayer.

Look at this alcoholic,

A recovering drunk,

Grateful for her past,

And focused on today.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct words. I like them.
"Grateful for her past,
And focused on today"
Sometime we must see the real world to like our world. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Alfred Kukitz]

Sitting round tables
With folks of lost light

Grateful for her past
And focused on luck!

Regards,
Al

[Sindu]

People change, sometimes for better than worse. The love and affection of others really matters and you showed it good. Picture isn't always perfect :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

That reminds me I missed my AA meeting last week.
Recovering from alcohol addiction is a tough path.

[Briana O'Connor]

that it is. thank you for stopping by

[Harmony-Lee]

How hard it is for them to learn to live in a whole new world without the security of drinking.
Living ... Feeling .... and Seeing for the first time in a long time.
And feeling so alien to normal social situations.
My Dad is a recovering alcoholic, 21 yrs now :-) & it's still hard.
Great piece.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Dayran]

To substitute the high ... with an enduring replacement ... of friendship ... family ... love ... and self worth ... is hard ... but is far more real than the bottle. Its certainly a poem of a battle ... well fought. Nice ...

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Christopher Robin]

Cadence is spot on which is refreshing, but this is crying out for a rhyming form. Nicely repeated non-repetitive imagery.

-Robin

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for your feedback. Rhyming is not my strong suit, but I will certainly look into what I can do with this. I am not too pleased with this one, myself.

[MomzillaNC]

How can you not be pleased with this one? Your words are honest and true. I recommend you read again the many positive reviews. While I see his point about rhyming (I'm undecided as to whether I agree), I cannot but reiterate the beauty of your stark honesty in penning your struggle.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much momzilla!

[MomzillaNC]

You're very welcome. You know I will always be honest with you.

[NoelHC]

Well written piece about a tough subject, handled with grace.

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much :D

[Avanthika]

very well described the picture.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[TL Boehm]

amen. Sober is good. My dad was an alcoholic as was his dad before him. My mom was codependent. Sober - and this poem - both good.