Stranger, Would You Mind?

A message of a spellbound girl to a stranger.

Stranger, would you mind?

If I take the honored seat
     Next to your glorious throne?
Would you grant me the privilege
     Of breathing divine air as yours?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dip my fervent fingertips
     Into your sea of golden locks?
Would you allow a mere mortal
     To caress your face carved like a cherubim?

Stranger, would you mind?

If I dare steal a kiss
     Just to taste heaven from your lips?
Would you accept my willing soul
     And take me now as your own?

Stranger, would you mind?

If you command your celestial crowd
     To suspend forever in this moment?
Would you trade your divinity
      And stay in this city bus with me?

Author's Note

Just another attempt in free verse. This poem was inspired when I was in a bus, sitting next to a gorgeous guy. :x

Reviews

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Wow, he must have been some kinda guy! Lovely piece.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

He is soooo heavenly. This poem says it all. ;) Thanks a lot!

[ron]

This is a wonderful piece blue. I think the one who heard that would say...YES.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

That's so nice of you to say that. Thanks, Ron!

[ron]

You are most welcome Blue.

[The Slayer]

I love when you sit next to that one gorgeous person and you keep looking at them but try not to look strange.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, glad I'm not the only one who felt that way. Thanks a lot! ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Bus rides can make us wish and hope. Good to have imagination and time to ponder on those long bus rides. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Sure thing, Coyote. I'm glad for your encouraging review. :)

[Frieda P]

Haha sassy write here, full of moxy, sounds like he was some sort of god, do they even ride the bus? Good one Blue!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I suddenly remembered the lyrics, "What if God was one of us? Just a stranger on a bus..."
read moreI suddenly remembered the lyrics, "What if God was one of us? Just a stranger on a bus..."

Thanks, Frieda! ;)

[Frieda P]

The buses would be on time, and cleaner then............ ;-)

[Angel]

He must have been a hunk! I love this poem, it is so cute...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Angel! Nice meeting you. :x

[Angel]

Back Atcha, Sweetie...
Write On!!

[Eddie Davis]

You are a master of word usage, and the poem reminded me of that Joan Osborne song 'What If God was One of Us?', though I realize that was not your intention. The poem does portray the sense of awe when one sees someone extremely attractive. Of course instead of telling him any of this, she just sat there shyly, but who hasn't had an experience somewhat like this? I liked this, very good job!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for such a detailed and encouraging review, Eddie. I appreciate this! :x

[kublakhan27]

How many times have I written this piece riding a bus? I have to switch the genders first of course haha...this really is how it feels though, and you've put it perfectly here...nicely done :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Haha, I'm glad I wasn't the only one who felt that way. Glad you're in the same boat. Thanks a lot! :x

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure Blue :)

[Sabrina Jade Howard]

I could tell ^_^ This poem made me blush. I love it

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I'm honored I was able to put color to your cheeks, Sabrina.. Thank you so much! :x

[Plume de flamme]

What bus do you take? lol. Great write.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hahaha, this is a good question. ;) Thanks, Plume. I love your pen name, anyway. :x

[Plume de flamme]

Thank you, Blue.