My love

When I see her

My heart runs away from me

Leaving me alone

He flirts with her

I don’t know why

She is so attractive

My heart starts blushing

Each time she smile

 

Sometimes little bullshit

Sometimes like a pretty doll

She is the love hole in which

Each time my heart falls

 

The door of my heart is only opened for her

All flowers of my heart make a bouquet only for her

Whenever I see her

I get the goosebumps

Whenever I talk to her

The faster my heart pumps

 

Like a warm blanket that covers my heart

Like a sweet home from which

One can never be apart

Like a singer my heart always sings

The song for her happiness

And if I am a king

Then she only

Will become my queen

Nobody else……….

Reviews

[Anushka joshi]

Great !! The poem and its emotions are really adorable . This is like emotions are flowing so freely and softly ... That was so nice .. and please Aradhana go through my new poems quiet a loud and I was , I am and let me know your views .
Hope you are doing all well ....🥰

[Aradhana]

Haa sure ! Actually these days busy with studies ree ... Today just checked the inbox and got ur msg... Thanks for the review ♥️ I'll surely review all of them one by one when free♥️

[Abhishek Asthana]

Second half of the poem carried away so lovely. Lined towards romanticism thus justified the tittle of the poem... The efficacy could be more immense... Keep writing !!

[Aradhana]

thanks for reading and review.......

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Some strong sentiment in this. A couple suggestions...you bring up "he flirts with her" in the first stanza...
which brings up an idea to run through the poem but it stops there. You never refer to that "he" again.
Like a loose end.
"The Bullshit" line is pretty colloquial and here doesn't quite match the more formal language of the rest of the poem.
Maybe introduce a reference to the King/Queen idea earlier in the poem so it doesn't just come out of nowhere.
Metaphors work really well in poems as do other elements, but they work much better when they are carried through an entire poem rather than just showing up quickly and left high and dry.
lots of potential with this piece.
it has heart.
j.

[Aradhana]

Thank you for your words sir. I'll surely work on it and will edit it soon.
ASBD