His Bag of Chips

He loves them
He enjoys them
Oh how much he loves his girl
As much as he loves his bag of chips

Everytime he gets a girl
Everyone sees him getting a bag of chips
Everyday he spends with his girl
Everyone see him eating a chip

Oh how much he loves his girl
As much he loves his bag of chips
But when he eats his last chip
He leaves his girl
He goes off and buys a new bag of chips
And now he gets to enjoy his new bag of chips
Typical he did the same exact thing to me

Reviews

[Raven Starhawk]

Brilliant. This makes a world of sense to me. I love how you compose the lines and get into a subject by uses a bag of chips. That was excellent.

[Jazique]

Only one thing and thats "Everytime" has a space between Every and time. Anyways it was not bad, probably not your best but, it was definitely creative and original using how a guy goes through a girlfriends so much just like a bag of chip, its a good metaphor and the ending was good; it could be better. Anyways well done.