Gravity Plays

When you find yourself wanting to be with someone but knowing instantly that it's something that's never gonna happen..

I feel you, It gets stronger,

Each step I keep forward..
I try,But you hold me back,

It throws me off track!

But I admit,

I like it being like that..
So, I come closer,

To see if you can hold me forever..
But you disappoint,

And let me off for a second..

A second that feels like a year..,

A year that's too long for me to bear.!
The closer I come,the stronger you get,

The gravity plays,till i regret!

You are my gravity,

You keep my sanity..

I watch you walk away,

From something you can't re-play..,

That moment gone,

When you're far away..
Something new born,

When you walk past my way..
And when i look down,

I feel like there's no ground beneath..

And when I try to feel,

I feel nothing,

It's like you're gone forever,

It gets frightening,

Thinking about you, i fret..

But gravity plays,till i regret!!

Author's Note

Like always,played with the words a little bit..
And sometimes not every poem has an happy ending! ;)

Please feel free to leave your reviews and suggestions ! :)

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Yes, I think we can all find this relatable in some way Aswin, The nervous feel in the pit of your stomach warning you too soon that it will not play out how we hope and want so dearly for it too, as we see ourselves drifting just inches out of reach, before we know it the gap has been consumed by the horizon and all we are left with is a tortured memory of what might have been.
I like this as much for the difference of pace and style I have seen in the few writes of yours I have read. Look forward to reading more.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Glad you liked it.. I always try to keep the element of freshness in each of my writes! :)
I'll try my best.. Thank you.. really appreciate it ! :)

[Ardra]

You are my gravity,
You keep my sanity..

Don’t walk away taking my sanity :) wht say

I watch you walk away,
From something you can't re-play..,
That moments gone,
When you're far away..
Something new is born,
When you walk past my way..
And when i look down,
I feel like there's no ground beneath..
And when I try to feel,
I feel nothing,
It's like you're gone forever,
It’s frightening, ---- do you think this works better

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank's for your review..

[andrew mitchell]

I enjoyed this write a play on her as well as the reader. well done! I liked this:)

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you ! :)

[several thousand]

Has "she" read your poems? Keep writing. You're good at this.

[Aswin R Prasad]

I don't know actually ;) but i had thought of it many times :p
Thank you :)

[SarahSt]

I've read a bunch of your poems. I can really feel the messages you're trying to convey through strong emotions expressed beautifully in your words. Thanks for the amusing reads and Goodluck :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

No! Thank you for understanding.. :) Really appreciate it :)

[TheMalady]

Loved this. Great words and they are very inspiring. Keep writing :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you! :)

[Lluvs]

Such an amazing poem (: I really enjoyed reading this ♡

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much! :)

[pb]

"So, I come close,
To see if you can hold me forever..
But you disappoint,
And let me off for a second..
A second that feels like a year..,
A year that's too long for me to bear.!"
I catched this verse because it's not just because i Like it, but I felt ur meaning..those words is me all the time..as u said: not every poem has an happy ending., but sometimes things that don't have a happy ending creates the best poem,. I see myself there and It's good that u played with words.
I can relate to this!
Good Job!

pb

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you ! Happy that i could convey my thoughts! :)

[Rye]

You are my gravity,
You keep my sanity..
I watch you walk away,
From something you can't re-play..,

I really enjoyed this write, loved these lines.
Amazing write.

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you .. really glad you liked it! :)

[SnowCat]

Love is like being pushed forward and held back all at once. gravity is a good way to convey it. I enjoyed the poem and look forward to next

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much! :)

[KLH]

I can feel the emotion behind every word. Hands down beautiful. Keep strong!

[Aswin R Prasad]

Thank you so much.. Glad that i could convey them! :)