A Poem by jaye river

i still remember what you said when i

asked you what your own heaven would be,

48 degrees, with mango trees -

it’s quiet, not loud, a soft warm breeze.

i hope you find it before we both die.

you can write me a letter from there,

a postcard so unaware

of two people who once laid bare.

because it’s no longer for you and i.

that’s okay, i don’t mind -

there’s still much more i need to find,

but i will think of you peeling a mango rind.

© 2024 jaye river

Author's Note

jaye river
i know they're not called rinds

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This is such a soft spoken poem that is both heartwarming and heartbreaking, beautiful job :)

Posted 6 Months Ago

"Its the thought that counts..."

Memories touch us all our lives... you have a smile - now, and that matters.

Posted 8 Months Ago

As with Chris below, I feel that it should be possible to be friends after a relationship falls apart for some reason. Can take time but hopefully things will sort unless there are good reasons not to of course and there can be

Meantime this is such a tender and personal thought,

'okay, i don’t mind -there’s still much more i need to find,
but i will think of you peeling a mango rind.

Posted 8 Months Ago

It’s really interesting that the couple split amicably, the poem is warm and flows gently, as was their parting. You showed that very well.

Posted 8 Months Ago

I like this and sent you a private message with a thought.


Posted 8 Months Ago

Some partings of the ways does not mean complete severance of the relationship. It’s possible to remain friends even if you don’t have that closeness any more. I sensed fondness here still and wishes for dreams to come true for the other. No bitterness, so refreshing.


Posted 8 Months Ago

this shows that friendship can still blossom like a fruit tree even if
the two are no longer sharing the same yard.
Closeness comes in different forms.

Posted 8 Months Ago

Delighful and oh so romantic, I think all of us dream of a place idylic to retire too when we've finally acheived our bucket list of things to do ..

Enchanting 🥰

Posted 9 Months Ago

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Added on October 24, 2023
Last Updated on June 6, 2024
Tags: poetry, free verse, love, nature, relationships, wlw, lesbian


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