Still with me...

Still with me...

A Poem by Bhavya Kaushik

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Still with me

 

 

With ticking of every second by this clock,

You visit my lonely mind.

But then all of a sudden reality strikes me,

As I’m living with the world you’ve left behind.

 

You are still with me….

 

I still feel your presence in this room,

My heart still feels for your soul.

Your belongings still smell of you,

And near my heart I will keep them all.

 

You are still with me…

 

With every tear which rolls out of my eyes,

With my hope which I know will never break.

And I miss you every time I watch a sunset lonely,

As loving you was my choice and not a mistake.

 

 

I have tried very hard to tell myself that you’re gone…

But though! You are still with me…

…You are still with me…

 

 

© 2009 Bhavya Kaushik


Author's Note

Bhavya Kaushik
written in just about 10 minutes :)

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This is so sad Bhavya! I can't wait for the day that you
are writing about new love... it will make my heart sing
for you !! :)

But, even in all of its sadness, it's such a beautiful poem.
You really know how to play with your reader's emotions my friend.
Ten minutes indeed! That just shows how extremely talented you are.
And I love the layout -- always so creative :)

Great work as always my friend!

Posted 15 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.




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You are so talented.
This is beautiful and so heart touching.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I love this. Simply amazing, I believe everyone can relate, especially me. Very well written.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Truly powerful. Great read. The lines seemed to be in perfect tune. Perfect wording.

I was reading some of your other work as well, and it is extremely well written. Your a great writer! Keep it up, I look forward to reading more :D

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so true,
sometimes being gone from sight doesnt mean gone from the heart... or mind
^-^;
sorry for the slow read, my read request is no lading properly on firefox
and writerescafe wasnt loading on IE for sometime
if you put up anything new and you want me to read, send me a link or title?
thru PM or comment would be nice

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very beautifully written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

Posted 15 Years Ago


Are you sad by any means? Of course it may be of some fictional account. It brings tears in my third eye

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this poem tugs at the heart strings...words driven by a flood of pure emotion

I liked your use of senses...enables the reader to experience your emotions

"As I'm living with the world you've left behind.
You are still with me�."
...your insight of loneliness is expressed nicely in these lines

"As loving you was my choice and not a mistake."
...you effectively express your vision of love in this line

HEARTFELT...VERY WELL WRITTEN!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I still feel your presence in this room,
My heart still feels for your soul.
Your belongings still smell of you,
And near my heart I will keep them all.

I wondered about that. As I know that distance, time and even unrequited love matters not. When the heart truly loves it loves for all of eternity. The great gulf between worlds matters not. Another stellar write from you.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh! This is so sad and full of sorrow, I wish for you to find someone again.

Posted 15 Years Ago


you're writing about loss in a very calm and mature way. not really living in the past, or fearing for the future. at least that's how i see it.... just a humble opinion.
nice work

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 11, 2008
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