Teardrops hitting the land

 †The Evanescent screams†

..

† Teardrops hitting the land†

 

 

Darkness was everywhere when I opened my eyes,

I found myself standing alone in the rain.

I could feel each and every raindrop on my cold skin,

And I could even hear my teardrops hitting the land.

 

I shivered because of the coldness inside of me,

I looked everywhere but found no one around.

Barely unprotected I stand without any help,

Just to watch my teardrops hitting the ground.

 

Another cold gust came to solidify me,

I turned blue while standing alone in the rain.

 I know somehow that this rain will soon end,

But my teardrops will always keep hitting the land.

Reviews

[MagiCrystal]

Another cold gust came to solidify me,


I turned blue while standing alone in the rain.


I know somehow that this rain will soon end,


But my teardrops will always keep hitting the land.

When i read these lines.. I know I have been bleed in your poetry...
I know the words you are speaking about and how they come out when we cry..
This is one night I will never forget ... you wrote my blood in this.. and even better.. your soul is all over this poetry... My god

[Elanra]

I hate to think of you crying but... lets focus on the work here.

One more time, without surprise i believe... you did a wonderful job. What surprises me is the way how you EACH and EVERY TIME make this right. Fanstastic rhymes which comes easily. I dont sense even a tiny bit of forcing in this. Its natural and achingly magical...

Excellent work...

[deeps]

This is so powerful and ever so touching. Very well expressed emotions.