One Day

This is about everything and anything

Defeated once more,another battle lost.

I hang my weary head in shame and count the cost.

I cannot go on in the direction I'm taking.

my life fades away,this is mine,my making.

My tears sting my face,my heart is broken,

my world falls apart,after they've spoken

I count my failings on fingers and toes,

and remember the names of my long lost foes.

One day I will be king,proud and daring,

up until then,I continue without caring.

Reviews

[EloisaWrites]

When we're shattered in pieces, we just pick up everything else of what's left of us and go on. So until then, go on and continue! This poem makes me cheer you on. Great write, Bob. :)

[CoraZanini]

"my life fades awway,this is mine,my making"
so beautiful really. and yes,better times will come!

[Bob Sherunkle]

I goddamn hope so! Thanks for reading my friend

[Daniel Sala]

Very sad, a curious reflection on self. A well-written poem.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey Daniel,many thanks

[Trevor Barnett]

What goes around comes around haha! Very well written piece that is pessimistic, yet optimistic at the same time. Good Job!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Ha! thanks Trevor,thanks for reading

[Rachelle]

The wheel will turn and what was once down, will go up.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Exactly.Thanks for reading sweetbind

[David]

This is a mindset I've recently gotten into, very well written and described

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey Ryan,thanks man.

[David]

You're welcome man

[captain]

It's like everything will be okay, this piece is a reassuring one, that one day, our time will come, we just do what we love to do without caring for the negative connotation of our mind and others. Very nice sir.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Many thanks Captain!Thanks for reading

[Raymond Federle]

The acceptance of fate and moving on is one of my favorite themes. Well done! :)

[Bob Sherunkle]

Thanks Raymond,much appreciated

[Jay Steitler]

Life can be not just a battle, but war. The angst in this is palpable. I know all too well, that the taking of ownership of a problem in that second verse, is the first step of a turn-around. Meaning clearly conveyed. Excellent work!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey Jay,Many thanks

[Matt Sayer]

This is fantastic Bob! Great rhyming, and the story of a perpetually beaten soul accepting his submission is just crushing. Excellent! :)

[Bob Sherunkle]

Hey Matt,many thanks for reading,much appreciated !