Please visit me again

You came late last night while I was sleeping.

Your touch was soft, your smell was sweet.

 

You were tracing my chin so gently.

Your lips found mine in the darkness.

 

   I nibbled your biceps and tongued your neck.

Then we feasted on each other’s warm bodies.

 

              I woke up with the taste of you on my lips

 and the smell of you on my breasts.

 

    Please, visit me again tonight.

 

Author's Note

Been having writer's block...I decided to try something romantic and erotic.

Reviews

[Forevermore]

i like this, its next level thinking, and i think its hot , phenomenal write, not too long, not too short. just right :)

[Forest Green]

Stunning...much punch in your brief poem.


Wow...

[外人 (Gaiji..]

elegant even when eroticism reaches its peak !!
Loved the structure, first of all it has stanzas and then they all (except for the last one) are composed by two verses. The whole poem is FULL of images and all related to body !! Well, I think being a model that's what comes easier to your mind (just like it should be for doctors :) )
Last verse has a great charm, it doesn't conclude the story, it leaves space to a continuation that every reader hope will be (he's coming back next night) :)

[Maximillion]

very good i liked it alot. i will keep reading your poems.

[Aella.lives]

Definitely feels like your waking up from a dream. Great write! :)

[Revery]

Very strong very clear. I liked it, it was sweet and sexy. Very good Monique!!

[John Fitzgerald]

Very interesting! I read this as waking from an erotic dream, not sure if it happened of not but not really caring if it did or did not. Just Wanting to feel the sensations again. Well done.