Envy

my very first senryu

Gritted teeth of ire,

she sips  her envy basking,

sickened by laughter.

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

Oooh, I like very much. You can feel the disdain she has at other people's happiness. Really well done!

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[John Anderson]

This is very beautifully expressed!

[John Byrd]

Absolutely beautiful poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Envy. One of the seven deadly sins. Artwork and words. Told a complete story. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Donna Marie Gray]

Everything about this poem speaks to the title. Wonderful senryu. I look forward to more.

[Namrata]

Speaks a lot. You are a powerful writer.

[Cory Barrett]

The green eyes of envy just keep staring

[Latifa]

thank you for the review

[TL Boehm]

This is so nicely done. Bravo.

[Christopher Robin]

People may mistake this for a Haiku, but you are 100% correct on this one Latifa, this is a Senryu, mainly because your subject is 'envy'. I'm hoping people know the difference.
Mathematics aside, this is a well planned Senryu, with a good accompanying picture. You have a way of capturing metaphor in English better than so many English speaking people it's astounding, good work!

-Robin

[Latifa]

thank you Robin for your wonderful review.