an open prison

an open prison

A Poem by Latifa
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it's been a while since I've written anything, so this is just a humble free verse that came to my mind to express some negative energy that is rising inside me.

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A maze of rage unriddled to peace,
 NO, not yet it won't!
the veins are still clogged with questions;
the face still plastic in perfection
where hands are wrinkled with frosting deficit;
the veins are still clogged with questions.
No clock, No seconds, No time
shall unclog the questions,
she needs oxygen of another planet to freshen up
she'll climb to stars if she'll have to.
No dreams,No hopes, No faulty imaginations,
the hazy truth is floating around,
while everyone is blinded by sluggish,
flecks of mumbling thoughts are imprinting the maps of
resolution from within:
she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown
for she may embodies freedom in the unknown.

© 2014 Latifa


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Amazing poetry and thoughts dear Poet.
"she'll fight the ordinary and settles for the unknown
for she may embodies freedom in the unknown."
I agree and like the above words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Really enjoyed reading this 👍

Posted 5 Years Ago


I'm really puzzled! Your character is such a complex person, yet simple to the very core. I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing.

Shane

Posted 5 Years Ago


Latifa

5 Years Ago

thanks for stoppin by Shane, I appeciate it, and yes you ot my character, it's exactly how you descr.. read more
Great .. thumbs up:) loved it .....

Posted 5 Years Ago


Latifa

5 Years Ago

thank you for the review
No dreams,No hopes, No faulty imaginations,
the hazy truth is floating around,

few lines i can relate too. Thanks for sharing

Posted 5 Years Ago


I especially loved the next sentence: 'the hazy truth is floating around'. It's never easy to find the truth in a place that is full of questions, a haze of answers that are floating in the air or in our mind. Is their place for a little bit of hope in this world or do we have to search it elswhere, another planet?? It's very deep. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Really enjoyed the flow of this poem from line to line. Kept me interested from start to finish. Good work. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Sounds like the lament of some poor soul questing for something, perhaps the peace of that region of the world which I'm aware has suffered some grave chaos over time and a great deal of political bitterness has existed for some time since Algeria threw off the shackles of French Imperialism only to experience the divisiveness of the political gulf that imperialism over time has wrought and is the shame of what was the colonial system. It was quite sad and disheartening in some respects, and yet a resounding declaration that the author is determined and ever questioning, ever seeking the answer that might allow her to experience the serenity she longs for and the elusive peace and freedom the writer seeks. The imagery was beautiful the words timeless and unyielding. I very much enjoyed reading it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Latifa

5 Years Ago

thank you for your review R.A Merritt
Quite an existential rant. Interesting imagery and use of language.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very deep poem. I love the flow and the repetition like "No clock, No seconds, No time" - It really drives the anxious feelings home! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago



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oran, oran, Algeria



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