do i belong?

Can you make me feel like I belong? In this world of hate? Will you be the one to love?  Or is that smile you wear fake? Will you make me belive you really love me? Or am I justa play toy to throw away if I need you?

Reviews

[Fallen Angel]

Once again...i really would look into changing the structure and the way you organize your words because it really would make it easier to read. but the words are perfect..

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

i like it it asks the same questions i wonder about.

[kbjami]

Interesting.
I like it.
sort of simple yet all of my writings are simple so don't take that as a negative comment. Sometimes simple is good.
Very good.

[Silere]

I can't comment on the style to which you organize your words..but I would not change any certain word.. There's a specific meaning to your poem and it comes across very clear. There's a definite hint at past hurt and feeling your strength to question the risk for another is felt here.. I liked it very much. Thank you for sharing!

[Coyote Poetry]

You need to ask these question before attempting a relationship. Users and abusers can hide in sheep costumes. I like this poem. The question of love are necessary. A strong poem with a purpose. I like the ending. You told a good story. A excellent short poem.
Coyote

[la Abeja]

These are very deep questions we all must ponder from time to time. Great write